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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
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Oregon

0 posted 2002-02-16 06:58 PM


what poem ever really is, until someone prints it in stone...


he leads with his right
in all he does
while I, in this diabetes thing,
lead with my stomach

she doesn’t know anymore
where to find food
she goes looking but can’t remember
I had already answered her “Feed me, feed me!” call

she has a sweet tooth, too,
starts dancing with delight
upon her imaginings

her gnawing begins
long before the aroma of flavors
are savored

rousing that which I’d suppressed
with all my might
in the fight for balance,
control


(maybe this should be called "Struggles" or a Pie Slice of Life)

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

© Copyright 2002 Virginia Salter - All Rights Reserved
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since 2000-12-17
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1 posted 2002-02-16 07:05 PM




(sigh) Such a wonderfully expressive poem, sweet friend, poetry has always been an addiction to me and always can inspire us and we crave to write our words in stone! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Virginia, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
Virginia
2 posted 2002-02-16 08:44 PM


it's a very interesting, pensive write with layers of perspective... i liked it a lot...

it's done once it's done.. .. i think many times writings can be overworked

jack kerouac said, "first thought, best thought"...

though i believe in rewriting and editing until you are happy that your work says what you wanted it to say, sometimes working it too much can muddy the colors, ruin the painting

you did a great job with this...

how about calling it "too much sugar"

just an idea

thanks for the read! great work!

Silver Streak
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since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625
FL, USA
3 posted 2002-02-17 12:14 PM


Virginia, I die with you looking to eating something good! That diabetes is a terrible thing. I have many friends who suffer from it. And there seems to be no answer but diet, exercise and medication.

As far as when it's done. It's always done - for a moment. And never done, when you want to change it. Thanks for sharing.
((Virginia))
-newell  

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Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

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