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Sunshine
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0 posted 2002-02-16 06:05 PM



My Beloved Poem


My beloved poem has yet to be sung,
For from these heartstrings its not yet been wrung.
Maybe today or, perhaps tomorrow
Will it come through joy, or mayhap sorrow?

My beloved poem is always Your Piece
For you have given pause, quiet surcease,
For you have penned one much better than I,
Happily my heart joins the crowd in sighs.

My beloved poems, they change every day,
Like children of heart, to join in my play.
Golden haired angels, each speaking to me
Garnering Keepers, this I do gaily.

My beloved poem has yet to be penned
That one to rise above all shall come when
I find me so old, and poems surround
Me everywhere, laid in gilt edge bound,

To read one last poem, then close my eyes,
Softly speak, “God, let the poets’ song rise.”

~*~


©KRJ
4 June 2000
revised 16 February 2002
[Major Rewrite!!!]


© Copyright 2002 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-02-16 06:12 PM




(smiles) Sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, your gorgeous songs and poems always touch our hearts and are always beloved among us all! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, God Bless You always! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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2 posted 2002-02-16 06:15 PM


This is a stunning poem, Karilea...

Only a true poet can think like this

My beloved poems, they change every day,
Like children of heart, to join in my play.
Golden haired angels, each speaking to me
Garnering Keepers, this I do gaily.

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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3 posted 2002-02-16 06:19 PM



Well, Ms. sunshine you've gone and done it again - this is absolutely beautiful! You just keep getting better and better.  I love this!

This is a keeper

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

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4 posted 2002-02-16 06:45 PM


To read one last poem, then close my eyes,
Softly speak, “God, let the poets’ song rise.”
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Beautiful Karilea, and I especially LOVE this closing couplet!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me~

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5 posted 2002-02-16 06:54 PM


Karilea, I think we all try to do better and better with each write, and I too am waiting for that one splendid poem. I havent read all of yours and I am sure you have several splendid ones, as this one is..floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

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6 posted 2002-02-16 07:22 PM


~To read one last poem, then close my eyes,
Softly speak, “God, let the poets’ song rise.”~

beautifully done....just beautiful.

Charisma

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7 posted 2002-02-16 07:34 PM


Sunshine~

This has left me speechless....ohhhh wow!


Lauren~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

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8 posted 2002-02-16 08:11 PM


I think all of your poems have been special. Very special.
Sandra

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9 posted 2002-02-16 08:15 PM


Love it.
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10 posted 2002-02-16 08:38 PM


Kari darling heart sister and holder of my dreamers soul what utter beauty darling heart truly this is one of your utter utter best. YES I know you knew I was going to say that. I sometimes wonder if I’ll run out of words of delight to describe your writing, but I know I won’t.

I could go all slushy on you now and say that there’s never anything but wonder that flows from your pen but you know that darling heart don’t you? Mmmmm of course you do

Your beloved poem will surely rise
When I with utter wondering sighs
Read the words that lie just there
Nor feel the shade of sorrow’s tear
Your beloved poem you write away
I’ve read the wonder of it today
The words are golden and they flow
From your pen in streams they grow
Your beloved poem is written now
And I don’t question when or how
You write that’s all you need to do
Your beloved poem has written you


Love and warm stuff
As always
Slushy

:kiss



To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79

[This message has been edited by Marsha (02-17-2002 01:24 AM).]

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11 posted 2002-02-16 10:45 PM


Very nicely done!

Corinne

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12 posted 2002-02-16 10:51 PM


Your beloved poem may not yet have been written but thins one comes very close. Beautiful writing, Sunshine.....
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13 posted 2002-02-16 11:17 PM


Gorgeous..beautifully done Sunshine..loved it

              ~Vic

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14 posted 2002-02-16 11:46 PM


let the poem's song rise, Amen to that


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15 posted 2002-02-18 07:09 PM


Karilea,
Just a busy little beaver! *bump*

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16 posted 2002-02-18 07:15 PM


Another beautiful piece Sunshine....the mystery of what next with the wish for perfection...we all can relate!!!
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17 posted 2002-04-03 02:07 PM


liked it
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18 posted 2002-04-04 10:28 AM


If you write one much better than this you will become a PL

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