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Kethry
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0 posted 2002-02-16 06:45 AM


Discovering flesh for profits sake
To rape the land and life forsake
To bind with chains and richer make
To gain foul wealth from what you take

Trading in flesh from people bold
To swap for silver, copper, gold
No right of freedom when they're sold
To run away brings death stone cold

Discovering flesh through ebon plight
With lash of whip and black of night
Degrading chains and cry of fright
Flesh abused takes right through  might

Purchasing flesh through conquers' quest
Take what you need and leave the rest
Their life is given so you are blest
To live your life and build your nest

Wrenched from home they loved and knew
Taken from their families too
Discovering flesh the white men do
To bind and sell because of hue

Discovering flesh when will they learn
That to the land the slaves will yearn
That one day they'll rise up - return
And you will find in hell you burn



Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown


[This message has been edited by Kethry (02-16-2002 06:08 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-02-16 08:02 AM



You took a difficult challenge, and far and away blew the competition to dust...

this speaks of humanity at its weakest, and humanity, regained...

Kethry.  Please, be proud of this piece, submit it to the main site, and submit it to publishers.  Now.

Kethry
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2 posted 2002-02-16 09:09 AM


Sunshine are you suggesting I submit this for the new book?
Keth

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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3 posted 2002-02-16 09:41 AM


Very well written Kethry dear..as always...
you put your heart and soul in this one

                  ~Vic

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will never betray."
— Confucius


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4 posted 2002-02-16 09:45 AM


Wonderful, wonderful work here, So very well written, so much feeling, strong, powerful, excellent, floria

Floria

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But die with all their music in them"
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dgvarner
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5 posted 2002-02-16 10:26 AM


wow..you certainly took that line and turned it around...but...wow...

this is a very serious piece here kethry...the idea of slavery--someone thinking they are better than someone else in such a manner, thinking they can OWN another human being just because he looks different on the outside....it makes my blood boil!  it makes me so angry i could spit!  

*sigh*..well done my friend...you put words together that i could not...

and ...challenge well met too!  

hugs, g

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

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6 posted 2002-02-16 11:25 AM


Keth - Really powerful writing here.  I don't know what to say, for your words say it all.  They speak the truth and they speak it very well.  Excellent writing.

Dave

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7 posted 2002-02-16 01:32 PM




(tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Kethry, this is sooooooo heartbreaking, my heart goes out to all these slaves of the world, I know how difficult it must have been to write this, for slavery has always been something I've wished to end so very much! (BIG HUGGGSSSSSS) I join you in your prayers that slavery will end and we can all be free and respected, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a loving and compassionate heart, sweet Kethry, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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8 posted 2002-02-16 01:50 PM


Powerful writing Keth.

I could feel the strength of emotion as I read. I don't know what the challenge was, but now I'm curious!

Enjoyed.

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9 posted 2002-02-16 03:36 PM


Keth, this is wonderfully powerful. I am very glad you posted it. Queen of Sheba would have been very proud of you, as I am.
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10 posted 2002-02-16 03:49 PM


An awesome write my friend, very powerful indeed! A great response to a challenge, well done!

We are all just prisoners here of our own device ~ Hotel California, The Eagles

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11 posted 2002-02-16 04:36 PM


*wow* Kethry what an awesome piece...and a keeper for my library.

((hugs))
Charisma

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12 posted 2002-02-16 06:01 PM


Kethry
Very powerful!This was great,I mean really great!!

Madame Chipmunk
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13 posted 2002-02-16 06:57 PM


You captured this issue so very well, Keth.
Powerful and also well written.

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

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Magicmystery
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14 posted 2002-02-17 05:22 PM


Keth... powerful words!! I know how I missed this one... I was asleep as it fell down the list of pages..... I am glad I went looking for something to read.... The sad part is that this practice hasn't disappeared in this modern day and age... people are still exploited because they look different ...

And I agree.... this needs to be submitted for publication...

I hope in replying that its visibility increased and it is read some more.

Cherish the good memories past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow.
But above all... be kind to yourself today.

Dee
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15 posted 2002-02-18 04:30 PM


Kethry, thank you for this,it really touches my heart. My Father in Law's family were slaves here is Australia. Only the government called it opportunity. They, the Kanakas, were brought here to work the cane, with the promise of return home after a season. They were never returned. The sad part is that it was only three generations ago, not hundreds of years.
I agree....submit this.

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life.     a brand

Kethry
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16 posted 2002-02-18 04:40 PM


Could someone please point me in the right direction for publishing.

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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