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A Little Calm in the Eye of the Storm
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A Little Calm in the Eye of the Storm |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas 
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This is a remembering moment, of the way love tasted like a first kiss- how it smelled all wrapped up in fresh sheets and how my bottom lip still tingles the way it used to when your fingers brushed it during a quiet moment between soul mates. Between us. Once in awhile I still listen to your voice- the recorded message I saved when you called me at 3am. Waking up to "I love you" spoken three times in a soft whisper made it true. It's funny how my real poetry doesn't know you're gone- it still writes itself and clogs up my arteries while the rest of my body goes numb and my pores print out everything else my heart refuses to accept. I sweat denial. It's 3am again and I'm breathing a little- but just long enough to hear your voice one more time before I cry. It's the eye of the storm and just so you know I'm sorry you left. When it comes right down to it, I only hate you when I miss you the most. "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow! This is excellent! I feel your pain dear...hang in there. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Angela, this one is poetic heartache. So well written! I've missed seeing your name around here. But not as much as you apparently miss that lover's voice. It's really hard to erase those things from your machine, much less your memory. Hugs to you.  [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (02-16-2002 02:35 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you for this insight...it's a good write...it comes from within... there were a few lines that especially drew the imagery of the pain, but they were lent without sarcasm, nor remorse...just fact, honesty...truth... well done! |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
This was very good saxoness dear..enjoyed your words ~Vic "Silence is a friend who |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
angela- i read this last night when you first posted it and i must tell you, tears immediately swelled up in my eyes and i just wanted to reach through the screen and hug you.... it was late .. very late.. and i was tired and didn't respond then... but i am back to tell you that this piece is awesome in heart, tender in beauty, and superbly executed from the pen of a Poet who (and right now you may not believe this but it's true) will be recognized one day as a very fine writer.... To have the talent you have with language combined with your excellent use of metaphor , phrasing and imagery, and your hard hitting honest approach... is a gift, my friend.... To have the skills you do at your age, all I can say is please never stop writing... make sure you get yourself published because the literary world needs your voice.... On a content level, all I can say is anyone who has truly loved has felt the pain and reminisce you display here and a love like that can, should and will be treasured in hearts forever.... True Love really never dies... ever... it just becomes part of you and you carry it with you to share again....... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"I only hate you when I miss you the most." This is such a simple sentence but so emotionally complex--I love honest poetry, and this is exactly that. You pulled me in and twisted me up like wringing out laundry! whew. You can write, my friend!  |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Angela, this is sooooooo heartaching, my heart goes out to you and your loss! (sigh) I hope soon you can find light through the eye of the storm and true love will again embrace you and bring infinite rainbows and sunshine to your heart! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is sad but beautiful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Angela, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Angela, this is soooo remarkable! Just an incredible piece of work and I could feel your pain reaching out. It will get better dear...just write it out, it does help. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
You have shared your feelings well...James |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Well, I read this last night too and didn't comment (insert bad excuse and begging for forgiveness here) for some reason. I did want to say that you always do this with such a great power and with what seems to be a confidence voice. I really enjoy your work, and this is more proof that you get better and better each time I read you. Loved this, BEE!  *Jenn* For all who watch.Dare you say hello? Come in and ask the questions that are on your mind, but spare me your judgement until you truly sipped of me. |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Thank you all so much for replying! For those of you who replied in response to the poem, thank you, it always means so much to me as a writer to get positive feedback from my peers. I appreciate it so much! For those who replied on a more personal level, all I can say is thank you for being there for me when I need those I care about the most. It's a tough time right now, and I sincerely love each and everyone of you. Thank you for your comfort. "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone |
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