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ecrivan
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0 posted 2002-02-16 01:28 AM



Picture a a face of serenity
observe surrounding ones of torment
sleep can always create a dream
man's soul shouts love and hate
ugly monsters whisper fire
fair angels sound trumpets
blue skies hover by
black storms cry
they rain terrible laughter
while your shadow is still
death is still fresh
as man's spirit fights to ascend,
the judgement staff points at his end.


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1 posted 2002-02-16 08:51 AM



...and that day comes for everyone.  Good write!

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2 posted 2002-02-16 08:56 AM


Alright I'm picturing the face of serenity...nope it doesn't go with the poem, which is outstanding and prophetic I might add.
Kethry

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3 posted 2002-02-16 11:40 AM


Martin - Really liked this one a lot.  Man, that is one judgement I don't want to hear for a long time.  Well done.

Dave

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4 posted 2002-02-16 11:49 AM


Dave,

I have my fears too

Keth,

MichaelAngelo's last judgement figures here


ecrivan
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5 posted 2002-02-16 11:51 AM


Sunshime,

silly of me to forget the surrounding facial expressions

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6 posted 2002-02-16 01:07 PM


Just thought I'd show my face!

But no, I did get the reference here...and that pointy stick!!! YOWSER! But, nothing like a little, um, incentive, eh?



Enjoyed, "e".

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7 posted 2002-02-16 04:40 PM




(sigh) Soooooooo wonderfully expressed, sweet friend, may we all embrace the wind and with our sense of judgement share our love to the world and bring harmony between ourselves! (big hugggsssss) We all love you so much, sweet freind, God Bless You! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martin, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

ecrivan
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8 posted 2002-02-16 06:03 PM


Serenity,

low and behold there is serenity here


Noah,

your thoughts are always appreciated


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9 posted 2002-02-16 07:14 PM


Martin...this is well written but very frightening!  I hope that God whomever, He or She may be...if He or She really is, is not too terribly judgemental....otherwise, I am in some big trouble.

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

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