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Severn
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25 posted 02-20-2002 03:34 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

great writing...you have such nice imagery here...

'as her old soul
mourned with different eyes
and her dangling legs
trembled timber length

she slowly disappeared'

this is an excellent finish..

one line stood out though, and seemed very awkward, and that was the 'drug by a horse'

it's just very heavy...and I'm thinking it might be better to rethink it...

Over all...a pleasure to read..

K

rwood
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26 posted 02-22-2002 09:07 PM       View Profile for rwood   Email rwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rwood

Larry: Thanks for the treat!!

Interloper: I thank you for reading them as they were meant dear poet! Appreciate your verse as well!

Kay: We are mutual then. It is a gift that only exists in sharing! Thank you so much.

Michael: I truly appreciate your thoughts. This one was a bit deep. Many thanks.

Sven: Yes..my eyes have seen the glory of returning. Thank you Sven Pen.

Vandana: I enjoy you so!!

Severn: Very perceptive poet. I appreciate such depth in review. Actually..that line..was the reason she disappeared for a while..but she is back now. It represented the harsh within the soft. And how the soft can still overcome. Thank you again.

Sincerely,
Regina
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27 posted 09-04-2002 01:32 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Regina,
This reminds me of a poem I wrote
called I Saw Her in the Rain --
where grace, beauty and femininity
disappears.

An aching piece.
I love yr work.

Mike
passing shadows
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28 posted 12-31-2002 03:45 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

I've missed your writing so much
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