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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2002-02-15 08:05 AM


there are memories
I just replay in my mind
a thousand times
savoring them with each sense
wearing them as new
rediscovering forgotten

like old brown sack flavors
with stains in the bottom
from delicious burgers
with too much grease
and fries
that had special seasoning

a fresh air dry shirt
off the line
in the summer
pressed with mom touch
her perfume on the buttons
and extra thread just in case

a puppy wearing big dog feet
on fresh mopped tile
in the kitchen
with a door accidently open
and a unaware lap
waiting in the recliner

the heart beat vibration against my ear
of a lover as I might rest for a moment
with her words muffled by her flesh
about secrets she never told before
but is so glad I listen
and want to know everything

she ever wanted to say

©Dark


[This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (02-15-2002 12:35 PM).]

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1slick_lady
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1 posted 2002-02-15 08:12 AM


"about secrets she never told before
but is so glad I listen
and want to know everything

she ever wanted to say"

this just takes my breath away...helen

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2002-02-15 08:19 AM


Thank you Helen..
so pleased that you like
the images

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2002-02-15 08:40 AM


Dark Stranger,
Well done enjoyed the read.

Enchantress
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4 posted 2002-02-15 09:06 AM


This is wonderful!  And I chose the same lines as Helen for the impact they had on me.  Great write here!
~Morning hugs, Nancy~

~Love transcends time and space~

Victoria
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5 posted 2002-02-15 09:07 AM


DS..i love this..wonderful writing as always...

              ~Victoria~

"Silence is a friend who
will never betray."
— Confucius


Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2002-02-15 09:34 AM


friend Sy, thank you so much

Nancy, you are gracious with your eyes

Victoria, slow hands waving with welcome warm


Indigo
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7 posted 2002-02-15 09:55 AM


a lover's ear
for listening,
their mouth
for soothing,
their heart
for all the rest

The mystery revealed by your wonderful prose...

Indigo

Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2002-02-15 10:02 AM


would be the planets
how they arrange
my mind

not a lover or god or new eye day?

thanks ms indigo

Martie
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9 posted 2002-02-15 10:11 AM


DS

I think this is one of my favorites of yours..such an intimate look into your memories.  Fresh laundry is one of my favorites...thank you!

hoot_owl_rn
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10 posted 2002-02-15 11:02 AM


Ds...what a collection of words this is to touch all the senses. Nice one
Startime
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11 posted 2002-02-15 11:10 AM


*sigh* I loved each memory you wove with your words...each bringing back a memory of my own...simply beautiful..A very wonderful read that left me feeling and looking back in time to a few memories that do not need to be hidden behind fearful doors...*sigh* oh yes...I love this poem. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Dark Stranger
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12 posted 2002-02-15 12:38 PM


Ms Martie thank you for reading and thinking of good things..that pleases me

Hoot'n Thank you for bringing you senses by and letting the words brush them

Startime, slow hand embrace to you...wear the memories with a smile..thank you


BluesSerenade
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13 posted 2002-02-16 12:37 PM


Oh you're good DS!
The dog on the fresh mopped floor
makes a woman want to scream!
Talk about sweating the small stuff,
when there's an empty lap waiting in
the recliner!  

[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (02-16-2002 12:38 AM).]

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
14 posted 2002-02-16 10:01 AM



Snippets of a soul...well done!

rwood
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15 posted 2002-02-16 04:58 PM


the heart beat vibration against my ear
of a lover as I might rest for a moment
with her words muffled by her flesh
about secrets she never told before
but is so glad I listen
and want to know everything

she ever wanted to say


I truly love this. It is a gift from one to another. A memory created by Being..on both ends.

Sincerely,
Regina

Mistletoe Angel
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16 posted 2002-02-16 05:16 PM




(sigh) Another beautiful masterpiece from your golden heart, sweet friend, your words always take us to the realms of your heart and memories, I LOVE IT!!! (big hugggssssss) We all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

SEA
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with you
17 posted 2002-02-16 05:39 PM


oh, I like this very much
the ending is so sweet....

Dark Stranger
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18 posted 2002-02-16 07:24 PM




   BluesSerenade  thank you for your moments..and for leaving the door open...for that dang dog..
      

   Sunshine  thank you for letting my snippets snap your smile
  


   rwood she says everything, with her eyes
she shouts secret whisper words  thank you ms r
  

                                                                    


   Mistletoe Angel

friend Noah, you bless me again with your touch to my words...I appreciate your eyes my friend and your soul

  
                                            


   SEA... so pleased to please you with this humble offering  thank you ms

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19 posted 2002-02-16 11:30 PM


there are memories
I just replay in my mind
a thousand times
rediscovering forgotten"





Lauren~



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