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Tim
Senior Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

0 posted 2002-02-14 10:50 PM

She was nine, and he was ten,
So long ago, in way back when,
The boy next door, red freckled face:
She a tomboy, no hint of grace.

Construction paper, red and white,
Scissors snipping, through the night,
Mother's ink pen, extra fine,
Will you be, my valentine?

Waking up at light of day,
Side by side, in bed they lay,
Wrinkles landscape weathered face,
Genteel charm of aging grace.

I am yours and you are mine,
Will you be my valentine?
She was nine, and he was ten,
So long ago, in way back when.

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

1 posted 2002-02-14 10:52 PM

I enjoyed the flow of this and the way the
ending sticks in you...nice..

GenXer
Senior Member

since 2001-12-15

Posts 583
USA

2 posted 2002-02-14 10:57 PM

Tim - Great story in this well composed piece. Well done.

Dave

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

3 posted 2002-02-15 10:10 AM

I like this a lot, Tim. *S* Thanks for the reminder that some things last. *S*

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2002-02-15 10:33 AM

Awww, Tim..so tender is the lasting love you pen!

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

5 posted 2002-02-15 10:37 AM

...and in their hearts.. perhaps they still are nine and ten.. Love it, Tim...

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2002-02-15 12:04 PM

And that's the rest of the story....

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

7 posted 2002-02-15 12:21 PM

Oh i love this Tim..very touching..

~Victoria

"Silence is a friend who
will never betray."
— Confucius

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

8 posted 2002-02-15 03:06 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwww, this is soooooo adorable and lovely, I never had a Valentine that young, but this year I am so happy I have found my first valentine I love so so much, my Joanna! (big hugggsssss) Such sweet memories fill your words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Tim, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

9 posted 2002-02-18 12:04 PM

Tim-
This is adorable...I love it.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Kathleen
Junior Member

since 2002-02-19

Posts 20
Indiana

10 posted 2002-02-19 07:11 PM

I truly enjoy your poetry, Tim.

Kathleen
(Irish Rose)
"My God is an awesome God"

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

11 posted 2002-02-19 08:54 PM

Tim this was so so sweet, It brought back memories for me as I met my husband when we were teens, then he went into the navy and I went my way and eventually we met up again and married, So you see, I love this poem. thanks. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

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