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ecrivan
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0 posted 2002-02-17 12:07 PM



castles of sand will wash away
castles of ice melt, what dismay!
mansions of cards rise from beams of steel
and fall in clusters at the sound of heels.

Castles of your mind have turrets set aside
and hidden passageways with thoughts inside
castles of candy can be licked until all gone
castles in my heart I build when I am strong.

Castles for king or queens to call their mates
remember castles of all seasons, it's time to find your fate:
warrior castles for vikings that sailed the seven seas
towers of locked befriended allies , keepers removed the keys.

In antiquity, castles to the sky we tried to build
too many languages were spoken for us to see a yield
castles of darkness would rise above midnight cliffs
harboured fantasia dragons that we slayed in myths.

unlock those barred castles of your mind
seek strength in the fortresses of your heart
all other castles are symbolic of our deeds
none of them outlast our endless will to succeed.






[This message has been edited by ecrivan (02-17-2002 01:23 AM).]

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Saunni
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1 posted 2002-02-17 12:33 PM


You said it all, this is just breath taking! I love it!

Sauni @~~~>~~

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The River Flows Not Past,
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ecrivan
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2 posted 2002-02-17 01:22 AM


thankyou Saunni, quite liked its flair myself
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3 posted 2002-02-17 01:50 AM


"Castles of your mind have turrets set aside
and hidden passageways with thoughts inside"


I liked this part best, cause it is soooo true nicely done!!

ecrivan
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4 posted 2002-02-17 11:13 AM


Hi Sea,

lots of clutter around the castle this morning


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5 posted 2002-02-17 01:14 PM


Martin - I am hoping I still have many passageways to explore in my castle.  Nice writing.

Dave  

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6 posted 2002-02-17 01:18 PM


ecrivan, wonderful write. I love Castles.
-newell

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Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

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7 posted 2002-02-17 01:19 PM




YAY!!! BRAVO!!! I LOVE IT!!! May we all find peace and harmony in the foundation of the castles of our hearts and garrison them with the love of God! (big huggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is marvelous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martin, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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8 posted 2002-02-17 11:33 PM


I really loved this one, Martin

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

ecrivan
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9 posted 2002-02-18 12:09 PM


Noah,

I like how you paraphrased the essence of this.

Madame Chip,

and I like the lttle animated cartoons you attach!

Dave,

I think we can all get to them


ecrivan
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10 posted 2002-02-18 12:10 PM


Newell,

never get tired of them myself


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