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Alicat
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0 posted 07-21-2007 01:53 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Alicat

She stands at ease.
The children are in another room;
they have my ears but she my eyes.
She stands at ease
watching her watch her hands
as she deftly peels another,
peels another,
another potato peel.
She watches her hands
as a wisp of hair comes free
sweeping across her brow
knit in concentration,
watching her hands make
long spiral peels.
The corner of her lips twitch
upwards.
Her profile eye slides over
seeing me leaning in door frame
watching her watch me watching.
The children are in another room;
they have my ears but she my eyes.

Alicat
7-21-07

*from a mental picture*
© Copyright 2007 Alastair Adamson - All Rights Reserved
Susan Caldwell
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since 12-27-2002
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1 posted 07-21-2007 03:07 PM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

This speaks so much.  

I hope that is what you were writing for.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

serenity blaze
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2 posted 07-23-2007 12:51 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Your writing lately has taken a turn of style that certainly becomes you. Laid back, but thoughtful and intelligent. (Much more like the Alicat I know. )

This is like your poetic fingerprint!

It is so "you" how could I not love this?

nakdthoughts
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since 10-29-2000
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Between the Lines


3 posted 07-23-2007 04:05 PM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

I could frame this~~ I think this is how most women would want to know someone is watching them.

Good write

M
PhaerieChild
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Aloha, Oregon


4 posted 07-23-2007 08:26 PM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

Very nice Alicat. It does make me think how I may be perceived by another. I agree that all women want to be watched in this way.
StormyB
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5 posted 07-25-2007 06:23 PM       View Profile for StormyB   Email StormyB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for StormyB

absolutly beautiful way to express.
 
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