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Allysa
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0 posted 01-25-2006 06:26 PM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Allysa

II.

The morning after
New Years in New Orleans
My sandals sliding off my feet
As we walk, buying pralines
Stopping to sip chicory coffee
Stuff our mouths full of beignets
Look at paintings, prints in the gallery
And you are careful to avoid
The puddles of dirty water
Pooling in the bricks
Me, I stain my feet with

Plastic cups half full of beer
Mardi Gras beads in the gutters
And litter. Old cardboard. Trash.
I know some of it was here before
But before that, it wasn’t.
And people, on the phone,
They keep asking me
“What is it like?”, “What’s left?”
When a hurricane hits a town
It takes everything, leaves nothing
But the stains on my feet

That don’t wash off in the shower
And I scrub them with soap
Almost wanting the reminder
That I was here, I saw it all
And of course it was after the fact
Of course it affected me
And I could never understand how
People could simply start over
How they could just go on with their lives
When I couldn’t even digest the idea that
these stains were never coming off my feet.  
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1 posted 01-26-2006 11:31 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

what an interesting write this is,
a POV we don't see on TV
(disgusting how that rhymed, unintentionally)
are you still there?
it seems much of New Orleans has yet to begin the recovery process...  
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2 posted 01-26-2006 11:55 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

*tears*

You wrote it so much better than I...

and yanno?

people aren't really starting over.

I fear the demolition hasn't even yet begun.

If you live here?

Then you know.

hugs you

stained feet are for survivors

mine are kinda scruffy too



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3 posted 01-27-2006 06:45 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

bumping this so that it is seen in Today's Topics List--

Because it's better than anything I have read on the subject and my feeble attempts at trying to convey this were merely tears, hitting the keys in unhappy accidents.

I'd applaud but you wrote it so well that...well?

*snaps*

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4 posted 01-27-2006 07:44 AM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

I don't  say this often..I am not sure if ever~~~

this is an amazing write and I could see and feel what you did through your words~~

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5 posted 01-27-2006 03:07 PM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

I live in Ohio, however, my boyfriend's family is from New Orleans (mostly Baton Rouge), and we went to visit them for New Years Eve. We stayed in the French Quarter, most of which is back open and full of people, a lot of musicians sitting on the streets with pieced together instruments displaying the traditional New Orleans flavor.

We went to Baton Rouge for one day to visit his family and their neighborhood seems to be pretty alright. His grandmother and uncles stayed in their house through the entire hurricane, even when the water started to rise. We also took a drive to see the majority of the damage, the houses where the water marks on the doors start around your knees and, as you drive down the street, it just rises until it marks where it would be over your head. It was unbelieveable. Most of the houses have to be gutted before they can be made livable again. It was unreal.

Thank you all for your kind words. I've been writing a few poems about my visit there, this one was my favorite. It's odd because, although my first visit to New Orleans was after the hurricane, I still fell in love with the city. The people there are absolutely amazing and it's just a fantastic city. I honestly can't wait to go back.
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6 posted 01-27-2006 03:35 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Let me know if you do.

I know this little blues place that is off the tourist track and you can buy those BIG ASS BEERS (hey mods, that is what they are actually called)

and you, lady, wrote this with such love and pain and yearning I would have sworn you were a native.

Thank you for writing what has been obviously too close for me to see clearly.

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7 posted 02-11-2006 05:24 PM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

Great writing Allysa

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8 posted 02-11-2006 08:52 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


This is for both you, and serenity,
who knows I was there
before the storm
and am applauding you for seeing it
for me, after the storm...

with a visitor's eyes...

serenity?

You already know my heart.

Allysa?

Thank you for taking me back to
the French Quarter, once again.

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9 posted 03-04-2006 09:13 AM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

It takes everything, leaves nothing
But the stains on my feet


rereading you..loved this line

:hug:
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10 posted 03-04-2006 02:22 PM       View Profile for Juju   Email Juju   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Juju's Home Page   View IP for Juju

NIcely done,

-Juju

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11 posted 10-03-2006 12:18 AM       View Profile for Ratleader   Email Ratleader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ratleader's Home Page   View IP for Ratleader

.....sigh....so many of us (of US!) lost so much so quickly....more than a year later, even an artists' site run from a place a thousand miles away, is somehow palpably less than it would have been....

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