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Wind Leads The Dance

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James_A_Fraser
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Wind Leads The Dance

The wind yells back at me
as if it had a grudge:
There is insult and comfort
in the unmitigated noise
though I had asked for none.
Terrified leaves scatter like bugs.
They dash for nonexistent edges
in a welter of dismay;
some know where to run.
An unsteady sunlight dares me
to walk, feel a cadence and dance.
I wobble and squint dust, pretend
a balance, lean into the throw of it,
learn trust in the windís holding,
to carry me even against itself.
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I think this morning I was caught in a similar wind tunnel. It's tough some days, just to find a reason to stand up and move forward.
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Jamie

I love to dance with the wind, but then you know that.  It's got something to do with the way his fingers run through my hair.  
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An unsteady sunlight dares me
to walk, feel a cadence and dance.
I wobble and squint dust, pretend
a balance, lean into the throw of it,
learn trust in the windís holding,
to carry me even against itself.

Your incredible images are matched only by the heart-touch of these last few lines... This is fantastic!
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There's a lot of conflict in the imagery in this poem (I think that's a very good and intended thing, but I could be wrong).  The only imagery is the dust, the wind, the leaves, and the sun (and maybe the bugs)---all things that harrass you physically, though you defy them.  You attribute intention to them, which I like---I'm not sure I see why the leaves are "terrified," but the rest of the poem manages to be very successful.

I did enjoy reading this.  Thanks for contributing to this quiet little forum.

Brian

"God becomes as we are that we may be as he is."  ~William Blake

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