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Marshalzu
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0 posted 02-23-2005 12:49 PM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

Surge 22/02/04

Thrust upwards and against
Swirling vortexes unite and disappear
In a clash of directions.

Descent through gravity
In haphazard motions
Checked by the breeze
For a moment
Thrust upwards and against.

© Copyright 2005 Andrew Sewell - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 02-26-2005 01:03 AM       View Profile for quietlydying   Email quietlydying   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for quietlydying

hmmmm...

i'm not sure what quite to say.  it really brought out so much for me.

but it makes me wonder, what does it mean for you?

'Christianity is the complete negation of common sense and sound reason.'
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2 posted 02-26-2005 07:28 PM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

It means a lot of things I guess, stuff that I really didnt think about when I was writing it. I guess the main thing that comes across is a sense of conflict and an appreciation of the calm periods within a storm. Thanks for the reply and the question, I hadnt really thought about the deeper meaning of it until you asked.

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3 posted 02-28-2005 02:57 AM       View Profile for Android 17   Email Android 17   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Android 17's Home Page   View IP for Android 17

This reminds me of confusion. Like---in a situation or something. Made me think, in a good way. Good write, Andy.

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4 posted 05-15-2006 02:30 AM       View Profile for Musicmaker1969   Email Musicmaker1969   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Musicmaker1969's Home Page   View IP for Musicmaker1969

This poem describes how I feel when I get overwhelmed with things that happen in my life.  I feel confused and like things are conflicting and clashing together and I just want to come apart.  A really neat poem that says a lot but in a confused manner - one I can REALLY relate to. LOL.

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5 posted 11-16-2006 03:53 PM       View Profile for rhia_5779   Email rhia_5779   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rhia_5779

I liked this, it does a good job of explaining how it is to be confused but I think it needs more to state that. Its confusing and doesn't give indication to what the vortexes are of.
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6 posted 11-19-2006 09:33 AM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

I haven't read you in some time, Zu.
This one made me think, a rare occurance these days, so kudos on that.
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7 posted 11-19-2006 09:38 AM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

I thought some, and I wanted to say more.

I think that what jumps out at me the most is the structure. I like the first line a whole lot, I think that it just submerges you into the poem and holds on. I also like how the first line and last line are the same, how it ties it all together.

Anyhow, just had a second thought about this.
 
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