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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking 
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Surge 22/02/04 Thrust upwards and against Swirling vortexes unite and disappear In a clash of directions. Descent through gravity In haphazard motions Checked by the breeze For a moment Thrust upwards and against. |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
hmmmm... i'm not sure what quite to say. it really brought out so much for me. but it makes me wonder, what does it mean for you? 'Christianity is the complete negation of common sense and sound reason.' |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
It means a lot of things I guess, stuff that I really didnt think about when I was writing it. I guess the main thing that comes across is a sense of conflict and an appreciation of the calm periods within a storm. Thanks for the reply and the question, I hadnt really thought about the deeper meaning of it until you asked. Andrew |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
This reminds me of confusion. Like---in a situation or something. Made me think, in a good way. Good write, Andy. The deeper we go, the harder it gets. |
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Musicmaker1969
since 2000-06-25
Posts 589Peterborough, Ontario Canada |
This poem describes how I feel when I get overwhelmed with things that happen in my life. I feel confused and like things are conflicting and clashing together and I just want to come apart. A really neat poem that says a lot but in a confused manner - one I can REALLY relate to. LOL. Sheri Adams Jesus lives in my heart! He can in yours too!!! |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
I liked this, it does a good job of explaining how it is to be confused but I think it needs more to state that. Its confusing and doesn't give indication to what the vortexes are of. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I haven't read you in some time, Zu. This one made me think, a rare occurance these days, so kudos on that. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I thought some, and I wanted to say more. I think that what jumps out at me the most is the structure. I like the first line a whole lot, I think that it just submerges you into the poem and holds on. I also like how the first line and last line are the same, how it ties it all together. Anyhow, just had a second thought about this. |
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