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Local Parasite

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since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

0 posted 2004-12-28 07:00 PM

Fresh as a flower, brighter than the hue
Of spring, and dimmer than the upper clouds,
Faint elements of winter fall in crowds
And on the trees and city lights accrue:
As each alights, each gives itself its other,
Ambivalently bending to its brother.

Surfaces painted have been frosted over;
Concrete and iron fade, and peel away.
Too bright to bear the sun's abiding ray
The clouds align and mirror where they hover,
A neutral scene, a quiet congregation:
Life is delivered in anticipation.

[This message has been edited by Local Parasite (12-28-2004 08:05 PM).]

Alicat
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since 1999-05-23

Posts 4094
Coastal Texas

1 posted 2004-12-28 08:48 PM

Very visual winter scene with the unspoken prayers for Spring's rebirth. I do like the personification of the snowflakes and clouds, moving with joyous determination to join their ilk and reflect the abstract reflection of light.

Being mostly tactile, but somewhat visual, this one did appeal to both, as I could see and almost feel the chill and hear the crunch of unsettled snow.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2005-01-01 06:51 AM

Brian, it has been awhile,
but you've been growing,
one can see that...

Happy New Year!

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

3 posted 2005-01-01 08:27 AM

This is exceptional! You've painted a picture with these words.

LoveBug

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Member Elite

since 2000-01-08

Posts 4697

4 posted 2005-01-20 07:49 PM

Pretty picture of a snowy metro area. It looks pretty, but is hell to drive in! Nonetheless, a lovely poem

Oh, make me Thine forever
And should I fainting be
Lord, let me never ever
Outlive my love for Thee

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

5 posted 2005-01-20 10:36 PM

I was homesick and this sure fixed it. I was born in, and lived in River Heights Bri until I was 21, and what I remember most about Winnipeg is ~ sure it was cold in winter, but the sun shining on the snow was absolutely breathtakingly beautiful in winter. Used to drive to U of M in ruts back then along Pembina Hwy. but a lot has sure changed now. LOL, yada, yada, but I sure don't miss those huge mosquitoes - no way!

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

6 posted 2005-02-09 01:17 AM

Brian, this was really lovely scenery! Really nice!

.....jo

iliana

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

7 posted 2005-02-28 02:59 AM

You make our city sound too pretty. I like it.

Great jorb!

The deeper we go, the harder it gets.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

8 posted 2005-03-03 08:58 AM

Bri,

this reminded me of a winter's morning, right here too. The fresh fallen snow and the Sun shining before anyone is awake.

The quiet of that is intense.

Beautiful, I love this style on you too.

I miss you.

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

9 posted 2005-11-07 10:15 AM

I'm never entirely sure what I'm going to do, but....I think I'm going to change my ways, and start reading only the best poets in this place....If I do, this would be a good place to start.

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