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Local Parasite
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0 posted 09-25-2004 07:09 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

She came to the Blithe garden in a happy state of mind
Exploring every little thing that she had come to find:

She came anticipating sun, but there was only rain:
She came to lean upon a tree, but it was split in twain.

She came to count the tulip's heads; there wasn't one to spy on,
She came to smell a rose, but there was just a dandelion.

She came to see the tire-swing, but it was lying dead:
So she sat in it anyways, and she reclined her head---

As if her dreams contained a garden boundless on all sides,
She ran her fingers through the grass, went up and down the slide,

She ran towards the limits of the field, but when I fenced it,
She felt it was enough to spread her arms and lay against it:

Such was the nature of her dream, and when I saw her start to wake
I bid her close her eyes again, for her imagination's sake.

[This message has been edited by Local Parasite (09-25-2004 07:46 PM).]

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Martie
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1 posted 09-25-2004 07:45 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Brian

This is so charming, it captured my heart.  Beauty is everywhere, for those like kellie (and you).   Thank you for my enjoyment.  
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2 posted 09-25-2004 07:52 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

smiling...

for imagination's sake...

at first I thought this would be a better title, but then I thought how enticingly innocent YOUR choice was and damn if you don't win again.

yer lovely yanno
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3 posted 09-26-2004 07:22 AM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

Can I be honest? I didn't like it all that much. It was a nice topic but it didn't really speak to me like your others pieces tend to.

You still rock though.

~AF~

I'm not being rude. You're just insignificant.

Kellie_Cantrell
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4 posted 09-26-2004 10:20 PM       View Profile for Kellie_Cantrell   Email Kellie_Cantrell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kellie_Cantrell

and you can visit the website with the pictures to interpret your own meaning as well.
www.angelfire.com/poetry/kemaca

then click the link to pictures.

Brian- This poem was very touching.
-Kellie
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5 posted 09-28-2004 05:14 PM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

I thought it a beautiful poem...and I enjoy meter and rhyme

M
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Well Brian,
I'm sure it is true. Most of us write for ourselves and rather revel in the fact that others like it too. Well done. It forced me to ponder the good in circustances that I might not find so good. Thanks for that.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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7 posted 10-14-2004 07:53 AM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

I really liked this peice, I agree with AF that it really didnt speak to me as much as some of you other peices but it really is quite a charming little poem.

Andrew
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Hey, Allan, I'm back.  This was an interesting poem.  A jab at urbanization, I gather?  In any case, it was nice and it reminded me sorta of a poem by William Blake.

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9 posted 11-05-2004 01:13 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

this was really good. something like in a book even.
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10 posted 10-01-2006 02:10 AM       View Profile for Ratleader   Email Ratleader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ratleader's Home Page   View IP for Ratleader

Heptameter....sheesh.....let me guess, you thought you were giving birth to a sonnet, but those fertility drugs they'd given you.......

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11 posted 10-01-2006 03:23 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

grin...

I love the Rat's response too. Quite funny.

and this happens to be one of my favorite poems too.

So thanks, twice.
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