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Janet Marie
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Illiterate Absence


"I miss you"


Three such small words,
how could they ever be
expected to hold the
definition of this ...


the weight of extent,
the depth of intent.



So few words will not
encompass nor explain.


What do mere words know
of absence or abstain?



Language leaves me
lacking expression.
Dialogue diminishes this
profound impression.

What verse could comprehend?
Oh that rhymes might pretend.
What eloquent exchange defines
inspiration's intend?


If words but could, they would transcend.


This silence haunts me ...
the separation taunts me.


Suffice to say,


this missing you ...
takes my words away.



     
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1 posted 07-12-2004 10:15 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

What do mere words know
of absence or abstain?


~*~

Maybe those two words
know one other...

bereft....

Excellent job, JM...the picture is absolutely blooming beautiful...but the sentiment...did manage to pull bereft out of me....

and you did what all good poets do...you made the reader FEEL the vacancy...

so at least I know I'm alive.  

Smiling at you, my wonderful poet!
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2 posted 07-12-2004 10:29 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Janet Marie

"this missing you ...
takes my words away."


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3 posted 07-12-2004 10:35 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I've so often said "I simply lack the words"...

So this

"Language leaves me
lacking expression."

would go to the core of me even if not another word touched. *S* But they do...

"This silence haunts me ...
the separation taunts me."

How I know... how it does... coloring our worlds with a vivid palette... defining "half-life" for us, whether we understand its scientific meaning or not. *S*

Excellent write!!!!

Now why'd you hide it???? *EG*

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She hid it, because she knows we'll find it...she's great with Easter eggs, too...
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I must be dreaming.  Someone wake me when the donuts arrive...  
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Donuts and coffee....c'mon, Dunc....live up to your name...
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7 posted 07-12-2004 12:56 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

"If words but could, they would transcend.


This silence haunts me ...
the separation taunts me.


Suffice to say,


this missing you ...
takes my words away."


OMG!!  And your words leave me speechless!
The longing and the ache grabbed at my heartstrings.
And the picture is perfect!

When I see your name appear I know it's going to be breathtaking..
and this heartache of a song is no exception.

Beautifully penned JM.

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ok..so you miss the ocean...gee I wish I was an ocean..or a huge lake...or a big pond...or ...well anyway, wonderful stuff ms JM.....nice to  watch you do your art

DS
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keeper...keeper...keeper
*sigh* why can't I write like this?
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dumb dumb and dumber
I forgot to hit that library button, so it
must be the fault of that second glass of wine! I could not possibly be guilty! LOL
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11 posted 07-12-2004 08:36 PM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

"Language leaves me
lacking expression.
Dialogue diminishes this
profound impression."

Yep...  

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Kari ... I knew youd love the pic...wish it was mine...then at least I would have been back to the ocean. yaya Thank you for letting me know the words worked for you. My muse is slight these days...I'm not sure if feeling this way is more of a curse than inspiration.
Thanks for shining on my verse.

Martie ... thank you for the hug... sending one right back at you...

Ruth ... yes.... (IKYKIKYK) and the knowing is moth hell....
Hiding? MOI?   Thank you girlie for the understanding and kind words.


Kari? is that a nice way of saying I layed a poetic egg?  lmao  

Dunc... make mine Krispy Kreme  lol

I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue

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Nancy ... thank you so much for your generous reply...your exhuberance is encouraging to my all too often, muted muse. TY girlie.

DS ... me thinks youre all wet. LOL Thank you groovy poet sir ...so glad you found your way to Haven.

Kacy ... Well pour me a glass and we'll girlie talk all night... thank you so much for the honor of being in your library.

Dunc..  YEPPERS  

thank you all for the kind replies.

I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue

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14 posted 07-13-2004 11:18 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

JM,
You touched my shadow with your sun
And now once more my worlds begun.
WWRS
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No way, Jose...Just a super omelet with crispy hashbrowns and sourdough toast...
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I am loving this new style of yours, me girlie!

I loved all that you have written, but the shorter versions leave some room for your audience to gasp at the poignancy of the ache, that only YOU translate this well.

I'd ask for more but it would prolly give you writer's block. *smirk & wink*

I love you Janet Marie. The ocean now forevers whispers your name.

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Sy... thank you my dearest winkie love ... Randy says to tell you hes being a good dragon and keeping cool... we were over 100 here for the second day in a row.

Kari... your kitchen or mine? ( now Im hungry for hash browns) yaya

KA...  lmao at your *smirk and wink* ..  writers block... honey chile..thats my middle name.
LOVE YOU TOO  girlie...   will be thinking of you tomorrow.
  

thanks to all for your kind replies and support.

I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue

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"If words but could, they would transcend."

"This silence haunts me ...
the separation taunts me."

Ahhhh, JM.     

You captured this sense of separation wonderfully. I loved the depth of emotion brought out in this piece. Your words transcended with a delicacy that was delightful and hauntingly beautiful.

It's always a treat to read you gator-gal. This was just lovely.

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit
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Kit ... your replies read like poetry my dear   Thank you sweetie... youre so good for my slight muse. and of course you are my smile in wait.  

thanks so much Kit.


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20 posted 07-14-2004 11:31 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

"I miss you"


Three such small words,
how could they ever be
expected to hold the
definition of this ...


the weight of extent,
the depth of intent.


So few words will not
encompass nor explain.


What do mere words know
of absence or abstain?


Oh my but I wish I had written this, for truly there are no words that could come to me that could express the ache of a need this deep.  Lovely work, and I do so know this one well myself.
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21 posted 07-15-2004 12:32 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Sharon ... nothing like an ache to inspire a moth. thank you for the kind words dear poetess..(love the new haircut)
So where did Tori take grandma today?
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JM,
================
"I miss you"


Three such small words,
how could they ever be
expected to hold the
definition of this ...


the weight of extent,
the depth of intent.
====================

Illiterate Absence inspires so much thought when it leads with "I miss you". My mind goes so many directions that it is nice to be led by you. And once again I find you leading the way. It is so nice to learn from you...

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Janet Marie
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Larry... I'd follow you anywhere.
thank you groovy guy...I had a hard time deciding on the title...glad to know it worked. So good to see your name tonite.
thanks for the kind reply.

I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue

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bravo moth... you know
 
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