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Riley
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in the pouring rain

0 posted 2004-06-03 01:17 PM



close my eyes one last time
feel nothing against this wind
numb to the world
trying to see what i never had
its all my mistake
i've apoligized....
with my scars, bruises....
they excentuate what i already knew
what i live
you've left me here
fallen on the edge
you never cared before
i'd give it all back just to have
a piece of me
be real

believe me, i've tried
to relive that pain
feel the tears stinging
at the sound of you

laying in the dark
i can see only one
black color
its been my world before

you can't see what you've done
because you never loved me enough to look

no matter what i'll always love you
i swear

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1 posted 2004-06-03 05:20 PM


Great writing
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2 posted 2004-06-04 09:19 PM


thanks...


<3

no matter what i'll always love you
i swear

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3 posted 2004-06-06 06:11 PM


Whoa, a rather scathing poem this is.  I enjoyed it, though I thought the lines were a little disorganized in terms of their lengths at times.

2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2
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Riley
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in the pouring rain
4 posted 2004-06-06 11:17 PM


thanks

no matter what i'll always love you
i swear

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