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Riley
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0 posted 06-03-2004 01:17 PM       View Profile for Riley   Email Riley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Riley


close my eyes one last time
feel nothing against this wind
numb to the world
trying to see what i never had
its all my mistake
i've apoligized....
with my scars, bruises....
they excentuate what i already knew
what i live
you've left me here
fallen on the edge
you never cared before
i'd give it all back just to have
a piece of me
be real

believe me, i've tried
to relive that pain
feel the tears stinging
at the sound of you

laying in the dark
i can see only one
black color
its been my world before

you can't see what you've done
because you never loved me enough to look

no matter what i'll always love you
i swear

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1 posted 06-03-2004 05:20 PM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

Great writing
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2 posted 06-04-2004 09:19 PM       View Profile for Riley   Email Riley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Riley

thanks...


<3

no matter what i'll always love you
i swear

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Whoa, a rather scathing poem this is.  I enjoyed it, though I thought the lines were a little disorganized in terms of their lengths at times.

2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2
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4 posted 06-06-2004 11:17 PM       View Profile for Riley   Email Riley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Riley

thanks

no matter what i'll always love you
i swear

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