Listening to every heart
Your critique window is open... May I offer a few suggestions on line breaks [I am practicing my critique technique on you...as well as some good advice on line breaks from others...let's see if this works for both of us...if you don't mind?]
I might be prudent
in covering myself here,
giving an apology
for the nonsense I have written.
Would it be correct to claim
that I have told you
that writing will grant you
perfect penetrating hindsight?
There is a vast realm
of human knowledge
that no amount of writing
can preserve or teach, that an
un-uttered tongue may only preserve
by word without mouth.
But I wrote that material upon paper
and now am confounded
as to why I felt it so important
to recount the strange experiences
of my recent life
The written text
bears no obvious clue,
is often written with few morsels
to help me understand.
Is that why
I am apologizing here, today?
No, that is not the reason,
it is the constantly changing meanings
that the text will bear for its reader,
the lost intent of its author laid dead.
Will we do any history a favour by writing?
Most certainly, I suppose we will,
but will we confound those
who would hide it?
See what you think...I know the help I've received in line breaks recently have really helped me along. Of course if you don't like them, then I at least thank you for giving me the opportunity to add a little input.