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Marshalzu
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Breakfast

Tentative steps of tiny feet
pitter-patter
of an early shower

*

Beads of cool clear rain
glide gently down its face
carried softly as it is
like sweet ambrosia

*

Calmly she creeps
          through
sharpened blades of green
and rests upon
   the warming stone

*

The distant trickle
of fallen water
cuts through,
the air
           refreshed

        *

Black and white
she sends her love
days old it still smells fresh.

Hmm...

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I enjoyed this one for its soft language and its pithy verse.  Good job.

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2 posted 05-26-2004 11:37 AM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

Some lovely imagery here. I can just feel the refeshing spring water and smell the flowers. Very nice work.. I won't try to decipher it atm, it's been awhile since I've read anything, so I'm rusty. I wanted to comment though, because I still enjoyed it very much!

Oh, make me Thine forever
And should I fainting be
Lord, let me never ever
Outlive my love for Thee

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Andrew, one of your best writes yet. Nature at its most beautiful.

one for the library.
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4 posted 06-03-2004 11:15 AM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

It's always amazing when you can hear the voice inside your head saying all of the words of a poem. Congrats, Zu, very few have accomplished this voice, at least, with me.
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