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Midnitesun
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Hearing the crunch of gravel 'neath my near-soleless shoes
only proves the way is not always smooth
and yet...
it is the path I must travel
without looking back upon the stones
as if they were obstacles.
Someone once called them...opportunities.
I failed to see the humor but stepped lightly anyway,
offering my movements to the world,
sacrificing the comfort of soft beds with satin sheets,
sun-kissed friendly curtains flapping
in the sweetest spring breeze.
Crawling 'round earth on stubbed toes and skinned knees
makes me realize how good it might be
to someday find the soft blades of grass,
sandy beaches that might anchor my feet.
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© Copyright 2004 Kathleen Kacy Stafford - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 04-20-2004 03:45 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Crawling 'round earth on stubbed toes and skinned knees
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ah--but you know what they say ...
tis not the destination but the journey.


Cool write poetess Kacy...love the theme and metaphor you played out well in this.

... and it's you ... you ... you ... you ...
the light changes when you're in the room.

M.B.

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2 posted 04-24-2004 08:44 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

sacrificing...,
sun-kissed friendly curtains flapping
in the sweetest spring breeze.

~*~

But the gypsy must travel...
and I wonder
at what will come
at the end
when it begins...
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3 posted 04-24-2004 10:16 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

thanking you JM, for your heartbeat
and Karilea, I wonder too

I will be leaving Alaska on Monday, down the Inside Passage, a gorgeous three and half day ferry trip. Should be arriving first week of May in Oregon, near some horse farms. Will keep you posted when I can.
*sigh* yes, I hope this is where I'll settle for at least a couple of years. LOL, but by now, no one ever expects to see me stay anchored for long.
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This seems a bit unfinished, and the message is a bit simple for my taste.  I'm less impressed with it than with your others, as it seems a mere beginning, but I'll suspend any negative criticism---

I hope you're having a nice trip.

Brian

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5 posted 05-03-2004 02:34 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

This is awesome but, I, like LP, would like to see you flesh this one out a little more (don't get me wrong, the writing is exquisite, the imagery awe inspiring)
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6 posted 05-24-2004 07:26 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

LP and Jeff, why do I feel as if I've been busted? LOL, this IS an unfinished piece, a mere intro to a longer story I've been throwing phrases at whenever I sit down long enough to...THINK through my actions.
thanks for reading, and for your comments. I really do appreciate the honest feedback.
 
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