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Midnitesun
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0 posted 01-13-2004 08:57 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Midnitesun

A blade of grass bending in the breeze
is less resilient than your spirit,
which I feel flies freely
in spite of your wounds,
all the restraints placed upon you
because of a careless move by another
on a highway so long ago.
You are a forever friend,
and although it’s time
for me to move onto another pathway,
I am thankful for the time we’ve spent together.
You’ve gifted me with many smiles,
so gracious and lovely they’ve often outshone
the warmest morning sunshine.
Thank you, Sue, for letting me be
your friend, and for giving me
the same friendship in return.

*for my friend, Sue*


© Copyright 2004 Kathleen Kacy Stafford - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 01-15-2004 05:21 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Well Sue is one lucky person to have such a poetic friend that is all I can say about this lovely jesture of words.  
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That was a beautiful poem.  It is always nice to read poetry that reflects such friendships.

In some ways the poem sounds a little bit jisjointed stylistically in places.  For example, you begin the poem with a comparison/metaphor which quickly morphs into what sounds more like a matter of fact statement in the line "which I feel flies freely".  However, just after that line you move back into the figurative language very quickly.

On the whole, however, I enjoyed this poem.

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3 posted 01-24-2004 03:02 AM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for iliana

Kacy - this was beautiful and a lasting gift of friendship.
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4 posted 01-25-2004 03:02 AM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

there isn't really nothing to say except "beautiful"....the first two lines evoked such powerful imagery that spiced up the rest of this poem and made it memorable...i would have been happy to receive this one...heehee

A blade of grass bending in the breeze
is less resilient than your spirit,
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5 posted 01-27-2004 12:14 AM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

I bet Sue loves this poem.. There's a beautiful feeling through this poem, and I reckon it can be captured perfectly with your line "You are a forever friend"..
A much nicer way of saying it than 'you are a friend forever', or 'you are forever a friend'.. Perhaps forever-friend should be hyphenated?

Your introduction is so loving..

Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^

Love - Lynne

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6 posted 01-27-2004 08:12 AM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

Thanking each of you more than you know for taking a moment to read and comment on this one.
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o
so this is where you've been hiding..
very wise and powerful words from the insight of you
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8 posted 02-24-2004 11:43 AM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

Beautiful writing Midnitesun
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A beautiful tribute to friendship...  if only we all had more such friends...
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10 posted 03-02-2004 12:59 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

thanking each of you for your moment in time
Sue is a special lady, and yes, she loved this write
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Kasy

I'm sure that Sue feels very lucky to have you as a friend.  You, and this poem, are special.  
 
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