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Said Sere to a "Victorious" Commander Christopher Michaelson

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fractal007
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NOTE:  Still more from my made-up world and the horrid war that once ravaged it.  Some background info:  Sere(woman whose name is pronounced "SerEE") is an old school friend of Christopher Michaelson, whose family was brutally murdered by the political regime that would ultimately become one of the major powers involved in the war discussed.

Let's go home.
We are home.
Here is home, and there.
We are all one in our loss,
fragments of shattered wares
and desolate forgotten nations.
Let's go home.
How dare you harken back to
an old barbaric way of living!
I would bury you now, but
that was the old way of life.

Those bodies over there are
no less at home than we,
and no less forgotten.

I know you've finally lost your
dream of vengance, your hopes
to bring back the world you loved.
Just be Christopher Michaelson.
Let us live.

I'll let you live
to be with me
and weep with me
and heal with me.
Home.

2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2
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1 posted 01-25-2004 03:07 AM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

Hi Kevin,
i found this poem intriguing. would like to read more poems about your made-up world..

How dare you harken back to
an old barbaric way of living!
I would bury you now, but
that was the old way of life.
~aroused my curiosity. what is the "old barbaric way of living" that you speak of? and is burial a proper decent way of sending someone on his/her final journey? why is it outdated? unless the war necessarities that we can't bury our loved ones and hence the new way of life=no burial

Those bodies over there are
no less at home than we,
and no less forgotten.
~i thought this to be very clever. hints at the emotional state of the leads without much saying....

again, enjoyed the read
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2 posted 06-07-2004 12:01 PM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

I'm kicking myself for missing this one, it is beautifully crafted and an absoloute pleasure to read, thank you for sharing it with us.

Andrew
 
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