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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
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It has been a long time since I've written, so keep that in consideration as you read this :P ~~~~~~~~~~ Dear God, What love you have given to me! How is it that a mortal can love so much With such unwavering beauty? Can it really be true? He has made me smile Through the hardest of times Gotten me through so easily Loving me so readily The way that I love him He changed me into a better woman So that I don’t even want to look back On who I used to be Dear God, I thank you And yet, what hate I still can see In those surrounding me I know if they knew of how I love It would hurt them They would hurt me To try to make me stop To change my mind To see things their way I’m colorblind I will not waiver I will not bend I will stand firm For I wonder… would they have accepted You If they saw You Dark skinned, Middle Eastern Walking in the deserts of Palestine For I see them now In their clean churches Whitewashed, spotless With a painting of a blue eyed man on the wall And I think of Your sermons In the dust, in the mud On the sea Who is dirty, who is clean? What is black… what is white? Oh, make me Thine forever And should I fainting be Lord, let me never ever Outlive my love for Thee [This message has been edited by LoveBug (12-26-2003 03:43 PM).] |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Oh... That's beautiful. I second that.  One thing that stopped me when I was reading it though, was the word 'gotten'.. maybe it's just that I have a personal vendetta against this word because I don't really consider it to be one, but I think it hurt the overall feeling of this poem a little.. just a thought. Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^ Love - Lynne [This message has been edited by Yu Lan (12-28-2003 08:01 PM).] |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
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Ah, you're right! lol! I guess I should have revised a bit more! Thanks for the reply.Oh, make me Thine forever |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Who is dirty, who is clean? What is black… what is white?" Precisely! "if you won't let me fall for you |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Dang! For a youngun (nothing personal...I'm 33 outside, but pushing 70 inside) you sure know how to pack a powerful punch. And you touched on an interesting point, one that has brought me wry amusement over the decades (both inside and out) of the Anglosized Christ, of the emaciated carpenter who knew not Black&Decker, of the smooth-cheeked cherub pasty in murals. So yeah, this one also made me chuckle in my wry sardonic way, for as some pundits say Man created God, so did some create Christ...in their own hygenic sterilized Betty Crocker image. Hrm...I'd better stop a'for I needs a lie-down.  |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Beautiful and touching poem. As far as form, it was not a technical beauty. However, in the world of spirituality it definitely has my approval. You have done a good job of making use of the apparent contemporary racism against those of Middle Eastern descent in attacking the hatred in others. 2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2 |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
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I'm not a technical beauty either! hehehe Thanks for the replies, everyone! Oh, make me Thine forever |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
I love it. All the best for 2004, Erica. Luv, Liz xxx "Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~ |
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