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0 posted 12-26-2003 03:41 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for LoveBug

It has been a long time since I've written, so keep that in consideration as you read this :P
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Dear God,

What love you have given to me!
How is it that a mortal can love so much
With such unwavering beauty?
Can it really be true?
He has made me smile
Through the hardest of times
Gotten me through so easily
Loving me so readily
The way that I love him
He changed me into a better woman
So that I don’t even want to look back
On who I used to be
Dear God, I thank you

And yet, what hate I still can see
In those surrounding me
I know if they knew of how I love
It would hurt them

They would hurt me
To try to make me stop
To change my mind
To see things their way
I’m colorblind
I will not waiver
I will not bend
I will stand firm

For I wonder… would they have accepted You
If they saw You
Dark skinned, Middle Eastern
Walking in the deserts of Palestine

For I see them now
In their clean churches
Whitewashed, spotless
With a painting of a blue eyed man on the wall

And I think of Your sermons
In the dust, in the mud
On the sea

Who is dirty, who is clean?

What is black… what is white?


Oh, make me Thine forever
And should I fainting be
Lord, let me never ever
Outlive my love for Thee

[This message has been edited by LoveBug (12-26-2003 03:43 PM).]

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Yu Lan
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1 posted 12-28-2003 08:01 PM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

Oh... That's beautiful. I second that.  


One thing that stopped me when I was reading it though, was the word 'gotten'.. maybe it's just that I have a personal vendetta against this word because I don't really consider it to be one, but I think it hurt the overall feeling of this poem a little.. just a thought.

Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^

Love - Lynne

[This message has been edited by Yu Lan (12-28-2003 08:01 PM).]

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2 posted 12-29-2003 12:32 AM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

Ah, you're right! lol! I guess I should have revised a bit more! Thanks for the reply.

Oh, make me Thine forever
And should I fainting be
Lord, let me never ever
Outlive my love for Thee

Susan Caldwell
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3 posted 12-29-2003 12:31 PM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

"Who is dirty, who is clean?

What is black… what is white?"

Precisely!

"if you won't let me fall for you
then you won't see the best that I would love to do for you"
~Dido~

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4 posted 01-07-2004 09:52 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

Dang! For a youngun (nothing personal...I'm 33 outside, but pushing 70 inside) you sure know how to pack a powerful punch. And you touched on an interesting point, one that has brought me wry amusement over the decades (both inside and out) of the Anglosized Christ, of the emaciated carpenter who knew not Black&Decker, of the smooth-cheeked cherub pasty in murals. So yeah, this one also made me chuckle in my wry sardonic way, for as some pundits say Man created God, so did some create Christ...in their own hygenic sterilized Betty Crocker image. Hrm...I'd better stop a'for I needs a lie-down.


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5 posted 01-10-2004 03:02 AM       View Profile for fractal007   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fractal007

Beautiful and touching poem.  As far as form, it was not a technical beauty.  However, in the world of spirituality it definitely has my approval.  You have done a good job of making use of the apparent contemporary racism against those of Middle Eastern descent in attacking the hatred in others.  

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6 posted 01-10-2004 06:15 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

I'm not a technical beauty either! hehehe Thanks for the replies, everyone!

Oh, make me Thine forever
And should I fainting be
Lord, let me never ever
Outlive my love for Thee

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7 posted 01-18-2004 05:42 PM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ESP

I love it. All the best for 2004, Erica.
Luv, Liz xxx

"Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~

 
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