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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden


0 posted 12-02-2003 02:59 PM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Allysa

Rearrange again she finds it's hard
to sleep when nothing's changed
and there's nothing to distract her mind-
Not even the stars on the wall
could distract her enough
to make her forget.

Repositioning the furniture
might hold her still long enough
to get up and wash the sheets
So that they might not remind her
and that she might be able to
glance off and curl up
without shivering.

She's living in code-
a place for everything
and everything in a place
where it won't remind her
of the day she forgot her innoncence
and left her courage at home.

Dyed her hair red to hide
her shattered personality
claw at it all you want
you can't reach her here
if only she could relive it
and never think of you again.

And what do you expect
when you steal someone's soul?
Did you honestly think
she could make it through?
Didn't you know she would have to live
forever changing color codes?
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Alicat
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1 posted 12-06-2003 03:35 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

Cynical self-loathing fills the speaker, freely taking and absorbing, internalizing the blame.  Interesting psychological aspects, especially displacement activities amid the highly structured walls being carefully compiled one hateful brick at a time. Very good writing, and definately a thinker.

Alicat
Allysa
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2 posted 12-17-2003 02:42 PM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

Very good at reading between my thoughts, Alicat.  I was wondering if anyone who didn't know the story behind this would be able to pick up on it.
 
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