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Riley
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in the pouring rain


0 posted 10-26-2003 07:32 PM       View Profile for Riley   Email Riley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Riley

alright now..lets see.! hey every1! yea..its been a while since i really wrote anything so lemme see if my little poetic brain will think something up..i need to write!


cast a single floating glance into the mirror
stained with bloody memories that once made you laugh
but no longer will you at this most delightful game
instead you look into my eyes and try to figure out
the stories untold as we take each others hand
God puts words on your lips but no voice may speak them
your fingers trace my soul and i can see it in the glassy reflection
you want to take me away but you don't know how
to scared to break the crystal tears i have cried
yet loving to much to let me leave
do not turn me astray against this world
mirrors lies tell you other than this
it leads you to not see me bleeding
the sky has turned against me once more
i will only take this cruelty a thousand times
then your hand will and has guided me out of this
and i smile up to the glazed mirror that is gently being fogged out of memory
by the soggy mist of your kiss

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

[This message has been edited by Riley (10-26-2003 07:34 PM).]

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1 posted 10-28-2003 02:47 AM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

Ri-

Congratulations on discovering painful poetry.  First of all, I think it's cute that you're considering someone else innocent.  It's like a tall midget calling a shorter midget "shorty."  I'm kidding, don't rip into me for that one.  But really, you've got a lot of experience to go yet, your innocence still seems fresh enough that it lends to your imagination and enhances your poetry...

There are some familiar images in this poem, blood and mirrors... I'd encourage you to mix it up a bit.  Although, on the other hand, I like how vivid you can be in the artificial world without stepping out into nature...

It's cool, and brings a lot to your style... glad to have read more by you.  Keep up the poetry, darling.

Much love,
Brian

Faith is a fine invention
When gentlemen can see
But microscopes are prudent
In an emergency.
~~~Emily Dickinson

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in the pouring rain


2 posted 10-28-2003 07:53 AM       View Profile for Riley   Email Riley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Riley

brian- thank you for your reply...i was reading over this again and i realized that it was really about something that happened a LONG time ago that i thought i was over. maybe i'm not...still healing i guess...only time will tell huh?!?! as for familiar...i don't know what else ta do! lol. but seriously anyways, thank you for your reply it is much appreciated and taken to heart.


riley

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

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3 posted 10-28-2003 08:24 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

the sky has turned against me once more
i will only take this cruelty a thousand times

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those lines drew me back to them...spoke to me with mirrors.
You have a unique style of writing using vivid and abstract images and colors..like a poetic Dali or Matisse.
Well done poestess Riley.

You're the color of the sky reflected in each store-front window pane ...
You're the whispering and the sighing of my tires in the rain.

J. Browne

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