multi colored love ( short )

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Riley

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since 2002-07-18

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in the pouring rain

0 posted 2003-10-19 01:12 PM

crystal tears have stained a streak
in the face you see before
eyes shaking so with invisions of
sweet rains waterfall is so close
did you forget your own essence
at home lying on the floor
tarnished with the blood gone cold
it was then on this breezy summer night
you loved me true

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

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Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

1 posted 2003-10-19 08:49 PM

Such bittersweet introspection, Riley - well penned, m'friend...

Riley

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since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

2 posted 2003-10-19 08:59 PM

thanks for replyin nan. ahhh life is good....my life is turning for the better!

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

Local Parasite

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since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

3 posted 2003-10-20 12:51 PM

Glad to hear life is good. Nice work with the short poem, it's a good way to make sure you can check the box next to "subtle" on your writing checklist. The ending works nice, it's one of the things I love about your poetry, how you paint obscurity and then caption it with one closing line.

Thank you for sharing this with us, Ri... and thank you for never giving up on poetry.

Much love

Brian

Faith is a fine invention
When gentlemen can see
But microscopes are prudent
In an emergency.
~~~Emily Dickinson

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2003-10-20 05:01 PM

This, Riley, is just totally lovely.

Riley

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since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

5 posted 2003-10-20 06:25 PM

lp...riley the princess who depends on poetry give up! HA! you make me laugh dear sir. i shall never give up. as for the comments..thank ya kindly!

serenity....thank you for such a kind comment...glad you enjoyed

*love**
ri

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

Wind

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since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

6 posted 2003-10-21 07:46 PM

this is awsome ri

What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall?
All walls are great, if the roof doesn't fall.
-yorke/bjork

Riley

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since 2002-07-18

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in the pouring rain

7 posted 2003-10-23 09:05 PM

liz- thanks a lot...:-)

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

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8 posted 2006-09-29 05:59 PM

"multi colored love ( short ) "

Ain't it the doggone truth......

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