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Ceinwyn
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0 posted 10-03-2003 01:20 AM       View Profile for Ceinwyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Ceinwyn



secrets
pirouette
upon
my flesh
faeries
rest
heavy
upon my eyelids
unspoken
converstations
linger
upon
my lips
intrigue
burning
my thoughts
like
hot
candle wax...

...your words...

bring
my
collapsing
cynicism
to
a
gasping
halt...

deep breath...


If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

© Copyright 2003 Kristen Brandon - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 10-03-2003 02:33 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Love the song, love the poem that came as a result, love the whole goddamned enterprise!

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (10-03-2003 02:33 AM).]

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2 posted 10-14-2003 04:01 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

Don't know the song, but it's a lovely piece.. I especially love the next to last stanza, where he brings your cynic to a grinding halt! I never liked cynical things lol.. but anyway, I love the structure of it all, nice word usage, well done.

Oh, make me Thine forever
And should I fainting be
Lord, let me never ever
Outlive my love for Thee

littlewing
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since 03-02-2003
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3 posted 10-15-2003 04:03 PM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

dont know the song??!!!!
*smile*

I'll sing for you then . . .

You
Soft and only
You
Lost and lonely
You
Strange as angels
Dancing in the deepest oceans
Twisting in the water
You're just like a dream


God Kris what beauty you write of
and yes . . .
one of my favorites
besides "Lullaby" and "Song for Heather"
and "There is no if" and . . .
*smile*
I miss you
xxoo
 
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