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bsquirrel
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unstitched sleeping process
promulgates in poetry. each
line responds to light's repose,
sound's unsound reasoning. if
one could hold out breath between
a clocks' eye view of surety,
one could swim the underside
of colors under glass. one could
press his face against, engaged
in all his fading dreams. the
sight is something undertaken
without want of dignity. each
sleeping line of verse upon
the page is burning in each blink.
untouched songs between the aisles,
filing toward the door. a magnet
pulling seeds of memories
straight across the unlit hours.
a voice of syllables imbued,
defining context within sound.
that holds the fading unread seams
on cue, and then he puts them down.


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serenity blaze
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1 posted 09-26-2003 12:24 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Another that begs to be read aloud.

I love that you are brave and astute enough to continue the meter past the punctuation:

"promulgates in poetry. each"

and continued, more pronounced throughout the poem.

I think this is truly your all time best love poem. This is passion, yes, but distilled with time and understanding.

This is mellowed wine from fine grape.

Thank you.
bsquirrel
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Thanks for the close reading, Sen. I'm really happy with this one.
Aenimal
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L@ve the feel of this, a slow unravel
 
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