How to Join Member's Area Private Library Search Today's Topics p Login
Main Forums Discussion Tech Talk Mature Content Archives
   Nav Win
 Sanctuary
 Poetic Haven
 Kid Sister
 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14
Follow us on Facebook

 Moderated by: Poet deVine, Martie   (Admins )

 
User Options
Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Admin Print Send ECard
Passions in Poetry

Kid Sister

 Post A Reply Post New Topic   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
Yu Lan
Senior Member
since 04-13-2000
Posts 1486
New Zealand


0 posted 09-25-2003 12:39 AM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Yu Lan

Kid Sister

Sister, you were so tiny
when they brought you home
and we all fell in love.
Skin like milk
and toes like baby mice;
sister,
you made snuffly hedgehog noises
as you suckled at Mum’s breast.

We pretended to be elephants,
our arms as waving trunks,
and you exploded into giggles
and wide gummy grins.
Green mash snuck in on an aeroplane spoon,
smeared against your cheek
and in your ear
when you turned away.

You couldn’t play catch
or understand Monopoly,
but you could climb the silver birch
as though you had a tail.
Mum was furious when you ripped that dress.
You just wore your others
skateboarding, climbing, play-fighting –
and ripped or stained those too.

Mum put your bed in my room
and I lay watching you sleep –
you’d curl up like a cat
and leave your eyes three-quarters open.
When Mum bought bunks,
we stayed awake and chattered
until Dad crept up on us
and bellowed from the doorway.

Your friend came for a sleepover
and slept as a bright purple sausage
on the bedroom floor.
She told me you liked a boy in your class.
You became an ostrich
then mumbled
and I wondered when you’d grown older
and how I hadn’t noticed.

And now I’m leaving,
just as you become a ‘lady’
(who climbs trees, plays hockey and swears).
Just to let you know –
I’m going to be around to hug you
when you’re ‘too old for hugs’, kiss you
in front of your friends, and I’m never
going to stop calling you ‘Kid’.


------------------------------
For my li'l sis... who was very embarrassed by this poem, hehehe.. Isn't that what older sisters are for? Embarrassing their li'l siblings? ^_^

Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^

Love - Lynne

© Copyright 2003 Lynne Miura, née Chudley - All Rights Reserved
Local Parasite
Deputy Moderator 10 Tours
Member Elite
since 11-05-2001
Posts 2929
Transylconia, Winnipeg


1 posted 09-25-2003 03:58 AM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

You have a really wonderful way of writing, very descriptive, but at the same time a very simple (and subtle) style that you use.  You work mostly with the evocation of vivid (and oftentimes even absurd) imagery, which is obviously essential to the impact of your writing.  I wish I could look at a purple sleeping bag and think of it as a big purple sausage.  Cooooooool...

This is a very sweet poem, it makes me wish I had a younger sibling.  Seriously, even with all the bad, it'd beat being the baby of the family.  How good of you to never want to stop calling her kid, kissing her in front of her friends...

It's great to see you in here again, Lynne.  Your bright smile always reflects on me from the screen.  

Much love from your #1 fan,
Brian

Faith is a fine invention
When gentlemen can see
But microscopes are prudent
In an emergency.
~~~Emily Dickinson

gemjop
Member Elite
since 11-18-2002
Posts 2663
Pencilveinia, USA


2 posted 09-28-2003 02:05 PM       View Profile for gemjop   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for gemjop

Oh god this was gorgeous. ah made me come over all sentimental and warm. God, i wish i had a sister like you. in years to come, she will look upon this, and well up with tears, i know she will. the way you took such everyday parts of growing up and made them so unique and special. you made me laugh, smile, and want to cry with this. always a sign of an excellent read and write.

loved the bit about mice for toes!

come back, post more girl!

~I wanna live, I wanna give, I've been a miner for a heart of gold~  Neil Young

Yu Lan
Senior Member
since 04-13-2000
Posts 1486
New Zealand


3 posted 09-29-2003 05:09 AM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

Thank you both so much! Oh, I am so happy, hehe..  ^_^ Bet you are just being nice..  

LP - Yeah, it's really neat being one of the middle ones.. People often say its unfortunate being the othe in the middle, because the first born is the 'favourite' and the last born is always the 'baby' and gets more attention.. I love having an older brother, and definitely am thankful to have a younger brother and sister..  ^_^ (Even though we all drive each other BARMEY!!!) Tell you what - you can borrow mine when they are being nuisances.. Howzzat? Hehe

Gemjop - I hope she does, hopefully it won't embarrass her too much..
I don't know what to say, I'm really glad you like it.. Yes, I don't come here nearly often enough. I'll post another tonight, that ok? I need hours to spend in here to read!!


Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^

Love - Lynne

[This message has been edited by Yu Lan (09-30-2003 07:58 PM).]

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 12-27-2002
Posts 8464
Florida


4 posted 09-29-2003 12:49 PM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

Lynne~

Beautiful and exactly how I feel about my sister(s).

Susan
dingusjr
Member
since 09-24-2003
Posts 423
Missouri


5 posted 09-30-2003 10:03 PM       View Profile for dingusjr   Email dingusjr   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dingusjr

I'm cheating again, being on the "senior" site.  Sorry, but I really liked this
poem...it works for brothers too and how you remember little growing up things
that are never the same when you are grown and gone.   What are "bunks"?
Is that something British, or do you mean bunks as in small beds?
Anyway thanks for the memories and letting me sneak peak into this site.
Larry.
gemjop
Member Elite
since 11-18-2002
Posts 2663
Pencilveinia, USA


6 posted 10-01-2003 09:33 AM       View Profile for gemjop   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for gemjop

Bunk beds!

one bed on top of another, y know a two tier bed, like when you were kids.

my niece has one. i get up on the top bunk, and can never get down. he he

Lynne, a pleasure to read this again.

~I wanna live, I wanna give, I've been a miner for a heart of gold~  Neil Young

Yu Lan
Senior Member
since 04-13-2000
Posts 1486
New Zealand


7 posted 10-02-2003 08:20 PM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

Hehe, is 'bunks' British?? I have no idea. Wow, I had no idea it wasn't a term used in America.. Yeah, beds stacked on top of each other.. ^_^ Gem, yeah I have that trouble, lol.. I climbed up to my sisters bed the other night to read her a story, and took ages to get down again.. bleh.

Thanks all!

Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^

Love - Lynne

jamesjiao
Member
since 04-12-2000
Posts 270
Backwaters of Avalon


8 posted 11-26-2003 05:54 AM       View Profile for jamesjiao   Email jamesjiao   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit jamesjiao's Home Page   View IP for jamesjiao

A very sweet poem Lynne.. by the way.. happy 19th birthday!

- James
The beauty of nature is displayed,
not through itself,
but through the creatures
dwelling within its bosom.


fractal007
Member Elite
since 06-01-2000
Posts 2032


9 posted 12-21-2003 11:35 PM       View Profile for fractal007   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fractal007

A nice touching poem.  

2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2
--Smit
My Creations

kaile
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Ascendant
since 02-06-2000
Posts 5323
singapore


10 posted 01-25-2004 03:12 AM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

Hi Lynne,
it has been long since we "talked"...how are you recently?

you’d curl up like a cat
and leave your eyes three-quarters open.
~i loved this bit the most. really a kewl bit of observation here. i like these sort of personalised details that help to differentiate a piece from other poems of a similar genre...

You became an ostrich
then mumbled
and I wondered when you’d grown older
and how I hadn’t noticed.
~nodding along vigorously to this one. isnt it a wonder how our younger siblings grow? (i have a younger brother)

take care

Yu Lan
Senior Member
since 04-13-2000
Posts 1486
New Zealand


11 posted 01-27-2004 12:06 AM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

You're right, it has been...
I'm so glad you liked this, hehe.. Yeah, younger siblings are great.. But it's so weird to watch them get older, and think 'geez, when I was her/his age, I was.. No, she can't be, can s/he?!!' hehe..

I'll email you Kaile.. I don't spend nearly enough time here any more So i've kind of lost touch with a lot of my friends here.. *sigh*

Luff!!

Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^

Love - Lynne

Grover
Member Elite
since 01-27-2004
Posts 2016
London, ON, Canada


12 posted 01-28-2004 10:14 PM       View Profile for Grover   Email Grover   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Grover's Home Page   View IP for Grover

Because I'm a gruff old bear of a man, I'm surprised I made it past the first few lines. But, hey, I'm almost crying because of joy and sentimental feelings. You made me feel good. God bless you and your sister! Grover.
Yu Lan
Senior Member
since 04-13-2000
Posts 1486
New Zealand


13 posted 01-31-2004 11:28 PM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

Hehe, thanks Gruff Grover.. I'll have to go and read some of your bear poems now.. I haven't seen you around before!

Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^

Love - Lynne

Mysteria
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Laureate
since 03-07-2001
Posts 19652
British Columbia, Canada


14 posted 02-06-2004 06:14 AM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Simply great story telling Yu Lan.  I envy those with siblings so much, and enjoy the stories each of you tell.  I hope your sister survived LOL.
Yu Lan will be notified of replies
 Post A Reply Post New Topic   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
All times are ET (US) Top
  User Options
>> Sanctuary >> Poetic Haven >> Kid Sister Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Print Send ECard

 

pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Today's Topics | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary



© Passions in Poetry and netpoets.com 1998-2013
All Poetry and Prose is copyrighted by the individual authors