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Riley
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in the pouring rain


0 posted 09-20-2003 09:52 PM       View Profile for Riley   Email Riley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Riley

been a while....tell me the truth
cold yet painless hours are spent
counting the scars you have been
cursing me with...all starting with a girl
the way i held my hand in yours
you would feel me shaking but you don't notice
to you a doll paint brown and black/white
wishing and praying i could leave
but i stay because you said every day you cared
what did i believe in that it was a lie
you wanted the pain coursing through your veins
to me transferred in a metallic way
only you would posess...only you could
forgotten how to remeber because my mind
was your victim and the life you spent
you made no sense but i would have killed
to have been loved like i should have



i don't want to hold on anymore
so let go into the darkness my fingers will
allow me the kiss of a gentle landing
as i throw myself into a black abyss...




* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

[This message has been edited by Riley (09-20-2003 09:54 PM).]

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1 posted 09-20-2003 11:10 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

oooh and ouch.

I know the pain of this one. You present all the vulnerable pain and questions with a subtle impact here.

You conveyed the emotion so well I find myself typing this with slumped shoulders.

Well done.

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2 posted 09-21-2003 11:30 AM       View Profile for Riley   Email Riley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Riley

serenity- thank you so much for replying.... i appreciate it

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

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3 posted 09-21-2003 03:34 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

yoar writing is getting moar and moar better. so it is ind off deressing butt i am two stoopid too notise.



really good riley

like most things

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
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4 posted 09-21-2003 05:40 PM       View Profile for Riley   Email Riley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Riley

lizz-- thanx...

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