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0 posted 09-11-2003 10:09 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Wind


I follow two creatures in the night
wolf
wants
To
tear me to pieces

I’d rather
grow claws
and draw
jagged metal

These machines can’t crash if they never start.

I’ve stained everything around me
silver,
the blood of mercury
takes flight
and everything comes to life
at night

“doctor? I think this one’s stupid.”
I think I can walk through this window
and stay safe

I repeat-

none of us are…

Sorry-
I guess I can’t compute?
I wasn’t taught those words
or what to say
reponse-
someone tell me
how to speak.

I think I’m
going
to have
a
meltdown

And…well…
I’ve been known to talk to photographs
and the occasional raincloud
though lightning pulls right through me
sends a shock straight to my...

oh...I forgot

tinman,
I know how it feels
but none of us

are safe…

Symbiosis
tells me
to
wait it out.




And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool



[This message has been edited by Wind (09-11-2003 10:16 PM).]

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littlewing
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1 posted 09-12-2003 02:26 AM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

Liz, amazing writing, as they all are
but this reminded me of societal breakdown, moreso of the human spirit . . .
you see quite well missy
xxoo
Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow


2 posted 09-12-2003 02:31 AM       View Profile for Kaoru   Email Kaoru   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kaoru

Gah.. this is..
amazing..
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3 posted 09-12-2003 09:02 AM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

And…well…
I’ve been known to talk to photographs
and the occasional raincloud
though lightning pulls right through me
sends a shock straight to my...

oh...I forgot

tinman,
I know how it feels
but none of us

are safe…

Symbiosis
tells me
to
wait it out.
you know...

sure you know...

((hugs))

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4 posted 09-12-2003 03:52 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Excellent! The LIV Bugs first single!
Wind
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5 posted 09-12-2003 04:16 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

lol..thank you guys.

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

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6 posted 09-12-2003 07:59 PM       View Profile for Ceinwyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ceinwyn

thats a good thing means I'm speechless...lol

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

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in the pouring rain


7 posted 09-14-2003 09:55 PM       View Profile for Riley   Email Riley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Riley

liz,
amazing poem here, just amazing...i love it!


rilllley

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

gemjop
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8 posted 09-15-2003 08:31 AM       View Profile for gemjop   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for gemjop

Mikeys right, it did read like a song.

The liv bugs are gonna be massiiiiiive!

This, by the way, is perhaps my favourite ever of yours, yes it is.

so many clever lines i wish i'd written. abstract and perfect!

Instant karma's gonna get you.

Wind
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9 posted 09-15-2003 03:47 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

lol...it's what happens when ya watch the wizard of oz and...what did I do after that? ohh..something about a robot or something...

and Riley...where the heck were ya girl? I'll hurt you if you run off again

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

 
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