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Ceinwyn
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since 07-09-2000
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Baltimore, MD


0 posted 09-05-2003 08:59 PM       View Profile for Ceinwyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Ceinwyn

i'm not one
to ask for
anything
but recently
with the change
of current thoughts
and messed up
circumstances
the picture
has gotten
to be a bit more clearer
not so vague
when i stare
into my mind
so i demand
no wait
more like ask
because
noone is obligated
to feeding my whims
but if you were
to be so kind
next time
when you
walk into my life
please turn off the lights...


If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

[This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (09-05-2003 09:49 PM).]

© Copyright 2003 Kristen Brandon - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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since 01-22-2000
Posts 18986


1 posted 09-05-2003 09:23 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

oooh that last line is a kick in the chest...
perfect poetic impact...love those kind of endings.
Well done poetess K.

When was the last time you felt this high,
you are the best I've ever felt.
Its so wrong not to be with you
Its getting harder to stay away.

SH

littlewing
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since 03-02-2003
Posts 9998
New York


2 posted 09-05-2003 09:59 PM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

She shoots! She scores!
(ahhhhhhhh)
that is the crowd cheering . . .
*holding eye from punch*
that last line hurt . . .
NEVER waste electricity
shame on him
Beautiful, m'dear
as always
xxoo
Ceinwyn
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since 07-09-2000
Posts 2238
Baltimore, MD


3 posted 09-05-2003 10:13 PM       View Profile for Ceinwyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ceinwyn

JM...always an honour to be graced with your presence!! thanks glad you enjoyed

Sue...silly goose!! lmao you made me laugh..thanks appreciate it..hrmm..lost for words..you know I thought it sucked but obviously not...even my rambles seem to make sense..we'll blame it on the pain killers ohh I should request a paper bag over his head too..ya think?  

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Wind
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4 posted 09-05-2003 10:36 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

the last line, it is perfect. perfect

insanity is not a crime

Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow


5 posted 09-06-2003 12:56 AM       View Profile for Kaoru   Email Kaoru   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kaoru

I agree with Miss Wind on that.. Perfection.
Aenimal
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since 11-18-2002
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the ass-end of space


6 posted 09-06-2003 03:29 PM       View Profile for Aenimal   Email Aenimal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aenimal

awesome and yes the ending..
gemjop
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since 11-18-2002
Posts 2663
Pencilveinia, USA


7 posted 09-06-2003 08:19 PM       View Profile for gemjop   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for gemjop

Ugh, he'll be back and we know it. yep, turn out the lights, give me some ear plugs?

Nice write Kris, just what i needed.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

 
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