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0 posted 08-30-2003 11:48 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Wind


I could never learn
that something as ugly,
ugly as you
could create splendor,
too beautiful
to be real.

And for a second there-
I touched light,
you brought color to my grey.

This red light shining through
glass walls and iron bars,

And I am helpless,
struggle would be self destruction
when caught within
this web of lies.

It ends right were we started,
and I'd be a fool
to speak again

But tonight is cold,
and I long for warmth

So wrap me up,
wrap me up
and pull me down…

These strings weren’t made for music


insanity is not a crime

[This message has been edited by Wind (08-30-2003 11:53 PM).]

© Copyright 2003 Liz - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 08-31-2003 12:11 AM       View Profile for Aenimal   Email Aenimal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aenimal

that something as ugly,
ugly as you
could create splendor

Reading these lines at first i thought this was a poem about me

Seriously though Liz, this is amazing writing your writing gets stronger and stronger with a depth of one who's aged beyond her years
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2 posted 08-31-2003 09:03 AM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

maybe Raphael...just maybe it was the fact that I didn't go to sleep until 4:30 last night, and I was going insane.

insanity is not a crime

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3 posted 08-31-2003 09:56 AM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

Liz, you have so many layers within your writing. I love the way you explore all the dimensions of your heart and mind, and then find ways to gift us with bits and pieces of YOU.
I enjoyed this write, sweet gal.
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4 posted 08-31-2003 12:02 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

Thanks...it was a song..not really my head or heart. but I guess thats where music comes from..I guess. Thanks guys

insanity is not a crime

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And for a second there-
I touched light,
you brought color to my grey.

at a risk of sounding cheesy...you always bring colour to my grey.

and the ending?

a masterpiece.

i want to steal the ending!!!!

Instant karma's gonna get you.

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6 posted 08-31-2003 08:29 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

I was watching a spider. and don't worry..cheese is good.

insanity is not a crime

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7 posted 08-31-2003 08:59 PM       View Profile for gemjop   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for gemjop

Cheese in moderation, always in moderation. I like to keep my cheesy outbursts to a minimum.

A spider! I like. found a humumgous one in my bath, I caught him in a pint glass and set him freeeeeeeeeeee.

never drown spiders, however big or small, theyre nice!
p.s
i thought i was replying, then i hit the button, and realised i was starting a new topic when it told me i had not entered a title.
see? cheesiness did me no good.
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8 posted 08-31-2003 09:02 PM       View Profile for Kaoru   Email Kaoru   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kaoru

Gah, you write so good... I love this muchly.

Especially the last line.

mooofuuu..

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9 posted 08-31-2003 09:06 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

lol..same thing happened to me. I do it all the time. no really..I was watching this huge spider spinning te web..it was really cool. and then I remembered these words and I was like I wish I could write like that and so I did. kinda. I make little sense today.

And Meg..yeah, but did you dig it oh I l#ve you guys

insanity is not a crime

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10 posted 09-01-2003 11:06 AM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

Liz:

another beauty . . .

So wrap me up,
wrap me up
and pull me down…

ahh yes I know, I know
sometimes some sort of comfort
overrides sanity
*smile*
xxoo  
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11 posted 09-02-2003 04:06 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

"On candystriped legs, the spiderman comes..."
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12 posted 09-02-2003 04:52 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

thanks you two..and that's just scary. where is that from?

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13 posted 09-02-2003 04:57 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Lullaby, by the Cure. I love love love that song.
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14 posted 09-02-2003 05:12 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

yeah..the cure scare me. like the song burn (shivers) ugh...screaching noises and drums. well I tolerate it sometimes but yeah..

we can't agree on everything though. oh my..i am craving pizza very badly. very very badly

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15 posted 09-02-2003 05:22 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

"And I feel it all fading and paling, and I'm begging to drag you down with me, to kick the last nail in/Yeah, I like you in that like I like you to scream"

from Fascination Street

or

"Monday you can hold your head. Tuesday, Wednesday stay in bed. Thursday, watch the walls instead. It's Friday I'm in love."

from Friday I'm In Love

or

"Dancing in the deepest ocean, twisting in the water, you're just like a dream."

from Just Like Heaven

or

"Something small falls out of your mouth/and we laugh/A prayer for something better/A prayer for something better."

from One Hundred Years

Genius, if you ask me.

I'll take some 'za.
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16 posted 09-02-2003 06:08 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

ummm yeah. I..like..rock..

I'd say something sweet and mellow..but as it is..I am having a meltdown...
I am having trouble with my brain..stupid brain..stoopid...brayn

insanity is not a crime

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17 posted 09-03-2003 05:17 AM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

Ahhh dont forget this one . . .

"If you die", you said, "so do I" , you said . . .

listening to them now, freaky
  

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18 posted 09-04-2003 09:55 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

um yeah..I listenned to that song. it now scares me more than climbing up the walls. ok..the spiderman comes to eat me for dinner? umm...and I did this why? because I trusted you

and I know I am a chicken and tonight I will be lieing in be for hours (as usual) not able to sleep because I am afraid of unknown forces.

but the song is pretty...honest...just...

insanity is not a crime

 
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