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timothysangel1973
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Undeniably, I spin

Unashamed, you enjoy

If I could reach inside,
would I find a heart?

Or just something cold, and
wretched?

Where do you matriculate from?

Is there a spring of evil, horrible
things somewhere in the darkness?

If so, I have obviously been wet,
and saturated by the fluid terror.

Unashamed, I love

Without conscience, you let me

All the while knowing,
that you will never return what you take.

My muscles contract in soreness
at the strength that it has taken to hold onto you.

My veins scream for oxegen,
because your hate smothers me from within.

Unashamed, I admit

Proud, you watch

As I walk away knowing
that you could never love
without destroying us both.

[This message has been edited by timothysangel1973 (08-26-2003 11:48 PM).]

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1 posted 08-27-2003 07:14 AM       View Profile for Kaoru   Email Kaoru   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kaoru

This has a punch.. I liked this the most, though..

"Unashamed, I love

Without conscience, you let me"

It spoke volumes..
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2 posted 08-27-2003 03:20 PM       View Profile for QjQ   Email QjQ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for QjQ

very nice penning n read,,

     

Nicole
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3 posted 08-27-2003 09:33 PM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

This has a lot of great lines, and I would probably end up copying the whole poem down if I tried to point them all out.

I really enjoyed how, with few words, you were able to depict a situation so very clearly.

I will read more of you!  

Nicole
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4 posted 08-28-2003 11:07 AM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

Tima, Good God Woman!

This person sounds just plain eeevveeell

My muscles contract in soreness
at the strength that it has taken to hold onto you.

yes, I do know this kind of hurt also

you are amazing
keep your head up
xxoo
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5 posted 08-28-2003 01:01 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Intense!
 
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