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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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My mouth tastes of the sky -- ashes fluttering from the night. The dry hot lick of flames cast along the treeline. The horizon is a rosy glow, a spent synapse misfiring, shading shapes in molten throes the light alone understands. With the wind, the fire moves. Dances, sways and bursts in place -- or lays a line across the field, surly, uninvited. The sky at day is hot gray steel, tinged in brown and yellow murk. Swollen clouds building up and spinning circles, roiling, raining. I wake to wipe the ash away, the fine gray silt that turns to coughs. It outlines every visual plane. It gloves my hands. It specks these words. When the wind is right I hear the sound of men, their digging tools, their payload drops, their desperation, as the August hillside burns. |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
I really love this one. You've given the fire a personality; talk to most firefighters and they'll tell you that sometimes it almost seems sentient. The words that you used are always very well chosen, as in this. Some of my favorite lines: "The horizon is a rosy glow, a spent synapse misfiring, shading shapes in molten throes the light alone understands." and "Dances, sways and bursts in place -- or lays a line across the field, surly, uninvited." I enjoyed the picture here, "surly", it generates a great image. I've experienced this before, and you've captured it completely. Very well done, as always.  |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
depening on how I read this, I see the wildfires in the west, but then I see deseration outlineing one person. so this has multiple meanings to me. an exelent piece, as usual. insanity is not a crime |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Mikey, yes I also got the inclination that it is of the wildfires . . . but it also reminded me of volcanic ash and people being trapped I know . . . xxoo |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
I might be dumb, but I haven't read your work but once.. I'm really amazed.. I should get to doing more reading.. This is really good. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks, everyone. You got it right, Wind. |
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