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Living by the fires

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0 posted 08-20-2003 06:53 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for bsquirrel

My mouth tastes of the sky --
ashes fluttering from the night.
The dry hot lick of flames
cast along the treeline.

The horizon is a rosy glow,
a spent synapse misfiring,
shading shapes in molten throes
the light alone understands.

With the wind,
the fire moves.
Dances, sways and bursts in place --
or lays a line across the field,
surly, uninvited.

The sky at day is hot gray steel,
tinged in brown and yellow murk.
Swollen clouds building up
and spinning circles, roiling, raining.

I wake to wipe the ash away,
the fine gray silt that turns to coughs.
It outlines every visual plane.
It gloves my hands. It specks these words.

When the wind is right I hear
the sound of men, their digging tools,
their payload drops, their desperation,
as the August hillside burns.
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Nicole
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1 posted 08-20-2003 09:29 PM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

I really love this one.  You've given the fire a personality; talk to most firefighters and they'll tell you that sometimes it almost seems sentient.  The words that you used are always very well chosen, as in this.

Some of my favorite lines:

"The horizon is a rosy glow,
a spent synapse misfiring,
shading shapes in molten throes
the light alone understands."

and

"Dances, sways and bursts in place --
or lays a line across the field,
surly, uninvited."

I enjoyed the picture here, "surly", it generates a great image.

I've experienced this before, and you've captured it completely.  Very well done, as always.

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2 posted 08-21-2003 09:11 AM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

depening on how I read this, I see the wildfires in the west, but then I see deseration outlineing one person. so this has multiple meanings to me. an exelent piece, as usual.

insanity is not a crime

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3 posted 08-22-2003 12:34 AM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

Mikey,
yes I also got the inclination that it
is of the wildfires . . .
but it also reminded me of volcanic ash and people being trapped

I know . . .
xxoo
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4 posted 08-22-2003 01:27 AM       View Profile for Kaoru   Email Kaoru   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kaoru

I might be dumb, but I haven't read your work but once..

I'm really amazed..
I should get to doing more reading..

This is really good.
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5 posted 08-26-2003 12:13 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Thanks, everyone. You got it right, Wind.
 
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