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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden


0 posted 08-19-2003 10:43 PM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Allysa

Any definition would be incorrect.

She canít fly without her friends
needs support to launch her soul
fifty-five feet in the air to escape
the constant fears ringing
in her bell tower brain.

Who am I smiling for?

The words on the refrigerator
are simply your way of challenging
her brain from time to time.

His hands are my own.

I saw them, I remember them.
I looked upon his face and it was mine,
but different, some how.

Every wrinkle is there,
hiding a memory telling her that
everyone feels this way sometimes
but itís not the same.

Identically.... different.

He is me and I am him
though our paths have yet
to cross every feeling is alike.

What is it like to look into the face
of a stranger and see yourself?

Difference is indifferent
to the opinion of right and wrong.
And up and down are
left and right when you have to
hang by your toes to see.

When I die not a trace of me
shall remain imbedded in this world.

Instead she will gather up all of her dreams
and sow them into her heart,
traces of stitches remaning long after
the memories have faded away.

You made your mark on me.
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1 posted 08-24-2003 07:22 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Instead she will gather up all of her dreams
and sow them into her heart,
traces of stitches remaning long after
the memories have faded away.

You made your mark on me.

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That ending is perfect poetic impact.
Great use of theme throught out this..
a bittersweet beauty..
well done poetess Allysa!

You're going to hear my voice in the morning calling your name ...
and know my love and my desperation were one and the same.

J.Browne

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2 posted 08-24-2003 11:21 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

"Identically different..." - I enjoyed the dichotomy of directions you took this piece, Allysa...
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3 posted 08-26-2003 12:17 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

I love the part about studying hands. In fact, that could be the title of this poem.
Allysa
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4 posted 08-28-2003 10:31 PM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

thank you all for your kind replies..

I have to agree with you, bsquirrel..  but sadly, it's a 24hr time frame edity thing...
 
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