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Guild Cage Notes (Deny me God)

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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 08-19-2003 04:46 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Cpat Hair

so string the lyre again
and pluck notes to waft sweet
on this stargazed night
that the melody
in tonal resonance might soothe
this the furrowed brow
of concern

would your hands moved across my back
the same way they move across your intent
and that mine might write new noted
on the soul of each song

I hear the call to prayer
and must dutifully face east
turning my back on thoughts
of lust and wonder

Did Allah not know love?

Play for me...
  sweet incense throated melody

and tell me how the prophets spoke

but show me in this dusk
the feel of musk and silk
of wine and skin
devoured in repast of desire


sing my captured bird
the songs of us.

[This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (08-19-2003 05:19 PM).]

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Janet Marie
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1 posted 08-19-2003 05:28 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

would your hands moved across my back
the same way they move across your intent
and that mine might write new noted
on the soul of each song

I hear the call to prayer
and must dutifully face east
turning my back on thoughts
of lust and wonder

Did Allah not know love?

Play for me...
  sweet incense throated melody

and tell me how the prophets spoke

but show me in this dusk
the feel of musk and silk
of wine and skin
devoured in repast of desire



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OH good grief..........
who could deny you anything after reading this???

"not I" said the moth  

"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

Nicole
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2 posted 08-19-2003 06:07 PM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

Holy cow (haha, no pun intended), I don't think I've ever wanted to know how to sing so bad!  *laughing*     What a little masterpiece you have here.

You know you're doing a great job when the reader can smell the incense and musk, and feel the silk.  There are some lines that I particularly enjoyed:

"would your hands moved across my back
the same way they move across your intent
and that mine might write new noted
on the soul of each song"

whew!

and:

"Play for me...
  sweet incense throated melody"

Very very nice, you are such a treat to read.

  Nicole
 
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