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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 08-15-2003 01:49 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Cpat Hair


On the skin of water
Reflected clouds caress
In tender float of evening orange
That bleeds red across rippled wind
And I am reminded of
A blush

Innocence perhaps never regained
Is still remembered
And in gentle ways that belie
The angst tuned whine of then

Tomorrow,
Then sun will again rise
To chase the eastern shores shadow
And the weekenders will return
Laden with grocery and gas
To mount their wave running annoyance
And sate them selves later
With cold beer and a grilled flesh meal
As they swap braggadocio

Sunset will return
A cooler breeze
And I will sit again to watch the skin
Wrinkle
Reflect
And remind

What ever happened to us anyway?
Did we simply forget
Or did caring cease to matter
As we wound lives around routine
And our own choices?

Perhaps one evening
Iíll see you in the sun
And be able to walk away without
My own blush of burn

Until then
Iíll watch the breeze
And feel the waters skin
If not yours
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serenity blaze
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1 posted 08-15-2003 02:01 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Smile.

(Why ask nicely when threats will do?)

You got me from the opening verse, Cap.

and the rest was just liquid reverie...

sigh. I'm having a poetic feast today.

Thank you for posting this.

Martie
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Ron

Intimate there, on the porch of your thoughts, watching the sun fall into the ocean.  It is a place I know.  Great writing, as always, my friend!
Nicole
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3 posted 08-15-2003 07:36 PM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

This is such a delight to the poetic senses. I know this all too well - and this stanza:

"Innocence perhaps never regained
Is still remembered
And in gentle ways that belie
The angst tuned whine of then"

is one of my favorites from the poem.  Very well done, as usual.  
vlraynes
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4 posted 08-16-2003 02:28 AM       View Profile for vlraynes   Email vlraynes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit vlraynes's Home Page   View IP for vlraynes


Oh my...this is gorgeous...an absolute masterpiece in verse.
You had me hanging on every word.
So beautifully done, my friend.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"My friends are my estate."
~Emily Dickinson

Duncan
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5 posted 08-16-2003 02:48 AM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

"What ever happened to us anyway?
Did we simply forget
Or did caring cease to matter
As we wound lives around routine
And our own choices?"

Or perhaps...dissapearing ink.  
Sunshine
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6 posted 08-16-2003 10:20 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


Well, my poet-friend...I simply fell in to this one and floated awhile...you probably knew I would...after all, this IS sanctuary...
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7 posted 08-20-2003 01:10 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Gives me the same pause for reflection and noticing of beauty as The Straight Story does. Awesome, Ron.
Susan Caldwell
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Missed this before...glad someone brought it back to the top...simply spell bindingly beautiful...

Susan (wonders what the threat was)
Wind
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9 posted 08-21-2003 09:15 AM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

this is so sad to me because I think about this all the time. something else I wanted to say but its gone now. sorry

insanity is not a crime

1slick_lady
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"What ever happened to us anyway?
Did we simply forget
Or did caring cease to matter
As we wound lives around routine
And our own choices?"

sad sad so very sad
fractal007
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11 posted 08-21-2003 11:59 PM       View Profile for fractal007   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fractal007

Nice poem.  It sounded a bit like romantic poems such as "The World is Too Much With Us," by Wordsworth.

2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2
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