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0 posted 08-13-2003 01:25 AM       View Profile for PoetryIsLife   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for PoetryIsLife

Your picture stares back at me
as I look into one wholly beautiful.
Time and it's demands may pull and plea,
but in the end I'm drawn to see.

The sight of you cements me inplace.

Do you know how beautiful you are?
Perhaps to cliched a phrase to
to do justice to your level, your bar.
Remember hearing of addicts with one tooth?

Their pain and fleeting joy?

No, no. For me, it's my money tree.
Seemingly to good to be real.
How is it you exist, how you be?
Why, love, do you even see me? Surreal.

Let alone know and fuel like no other.

Such a lovely woman you're becoming.
I'm scared to let you in.
Yet fearless. Yearning.
You warm the coldness that dwells beyond sway.
Love, I can't look away.
© Copyright 2003 Daniel Redding - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 08-13-2003 09:35 AM       View Profile for Child of the Stars   Email Child of the Stars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Child of the Stars

Ahh...I don't remember this, but I enjoyed it this time around. Sort of made me wince, though, because of all your itsy bitsy grammatical errors. (Its is possessive, it's is a contraction. To is a preposition/adverb, too is an adjective. Catch my drift? ) I realize it's a repost and everything, but it's just hard for a grammar kid like me not to be put off by those types of things.

The poem itself was wonderful...You've uncovered some unique issues concerning relationships in general, some things of which we're not always aware.

  ~Carly

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2 posted 08-13-2003 04:32 PM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

Read and enjoyed muchly

Andy
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