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0 posted 08-13-2003 01:10 AM       View Profile for Skyfire   Email Skyfire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Skyfire

You're not so hard to
write out of my system anymore.
Oh don't worry,
Pretty Boy,
you are VERY easy
to get over

There's nothing like a good fight with a horse to put your problems into perspective

© Copyright 2003 Rhonda Adolph - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 08-13-2003 01:15 AM       View Profile for PoetryIsLife   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoetryIsLife

This is a great vent, Rhonda. A great vent. Short, to the point. Nicely done.

~Titus

PS: I WILL email you soon. I haven't not for lack of desire, just time.

The few. The proud. The Marines.

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2 posted 08-13-2003 06:55 AM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

*chuckle*

Was that hiss I just heard the deflation of an ego?  This should do the trick!  

I've written like this a time or two.  That's the beauty of poetry, it's theraputic and cathartic, and can be quite nice at the same time!  
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3 posted 08-13-2003 04:26 PM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

hehe I just love this, great writing Rhonda

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4 posted 08-16-2003 12:36 AM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

I just plain don't like vents, I can't stop saying that and I can't get over it.  Vents just make me sit back and think, well, this is therapy and about as interesting to me as reading someone else's doctor bill.  I think that poetry is necessarily something a lot more than a few angry words.  Sorry, Rhonda, I don't mean to offend you, I'm just making a general statement, because your critique message says you'd really like to improve.

I think that if you want to write something poetic, you should say something in a manner more than just ordinary language.  Look into something and find a deeper truth.  Exaggerate it a little, employ metaphor, take your poem places instead of just a few careless words... depth and substance are essential and getting over a breakup tends not to cut it...

Okay, that's just me being perfectly honest with you, and know that I do so out of respect, and not malice... I just think there's a lot that you're allowing yourself to miss out on, with poetry like this...

At any rate, thanks for helping out with the Sanctuary forum... it's nice to see your name in the replies, you're one of the people that help keep this place moving.  It's so active lately that it's hard for me to keep up with everything, but I'm really trying...

Hoping to see more of you, here and otherwise.  

Brian

Faith is a fine invention
When gentlemen can see
But microscopes are prudent
In an emergency.
~~~Emily Dickinson

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5 posted 08-16-2003 12:53 AM       View Profile for Skyfire   Email Skyfire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfire

Ti, Nicole, Andrew, thank you for the replies.

Brian... thank you You gave me something to think about and I think that possibly you opened the way for me to take my writing in a different direction finally. Thanks again!!

There's nothing like a good fight with a horse to put your problems into perspective
Happy Trails To You

 
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