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Nicole
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0 posted 2003-08-11 11:12 PM


the crepe myrtle is in bloom and i am
in love with the colors.
tiny crinkled petals, like little old men
clustered and huddled together
shivering in the breeze - a delicate thing

wind blowing and i hear the crack
of another onslaught of what the natives
call a "shower"
(shower - hurricane...I can see the similarities)

there is a heady, heavy scent
almost musky and sensual
i wonder if the whole of the south
is wrapped in its heavy veil

the clouds are large and angry
yelling
as if their bloated condition is all my fault
it is exhilirating, and I can hear
the wall encroaching
and feel the natural animal instinct to run

shivering and stubborn
too much to fight, subsumed
into the greater - 'cause Gaia does not pick
favorites
(althought right now I would give anything
to be a mole, quietly blind)

i am alone in the storm

the little old men lose their grip
but in passing
pause to catch their petals in my hair
and caress a cheek

whisper secret

'it is well, you are of her and she will
hold you, when your time comes'

lightning

my eye sees only pain, there is no center yet
-i am not ready

© Copyright 2003 Nicole Williams - All Rights Reserved
Tramp Poet
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Could Be Anywhere...
1 posted 2003-08-12 09:40 AM


wow Nicole
your imagry is delicious!
Daniel

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2 posted 2003-08-12 05:40 PM


Oh my, the imagery, the phrases, jeez every word...is fantastic.

I've missed reading you Nicole, you are one of my favourites. Will you teach me to write like you?

I'm keeping this...

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking  smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)


Nicole
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3 posted 2003-08-12 11:18 PM


Thanks you two, I wish I were more happy with this one - but it felt more detached when I wrote it, not sure why?  I almost feel like I'm reading a term paper out loud, rather than making a reader feel the poem.  Any suggestions would be wonderful.

But...I love the praise... heh

And Maree, dear dear Maree - lol - when I feel like I want to write something, but I need some inspiration, there are a handful of poets that I search for and read - and one of them is you.  You need no lessons from this poor girl.  

Hugs!

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4 posted 2003-08-13 01:03 AM


Ya know... I don't know if this was intentional or not, but I got more than a surface meaning to this... beautiful job is all I can say

There's nothing like a good fight with a horse to put your problems into perspective

Nicole
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5 posted 2003-08-13 08:57 AM


  yep

I usually try to, but this one was written a little heavy-handed.  Thank you though, very much!


Susan Caldwell
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6 posted 2003-08-13 01:49 PM


"the crepe myrtle is in bloom and i am
in love with the colors.
tiny crinkled petals, like little old men
clustered and huddled together
shivering in the breeze - a delicate thing"

Are you telling me you honestly don't think the reader felt that?  I saw it, tasted it and smelled it!  Wonderful job!  

Susan


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7 posted 2003-08-13 04:38 PM


Wonderful reading thanks for sharing

Andy

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8 posted 2003-08-16 12:14 PM


Oh, I especially love the line towards the end:
quote:
'it is well, you are of her and she will
hold you, when your time comes'
That's VERY cool, I love that part... frightening to think of it that way.  I also loved your subtle use of images to set a mood of gloom and forbearing.  I felt it, especially when I read of the clouds yelling.  Fantastic poetry...

Glad you chose to share it with us, Nicole... thanks for the very worthy contribution.

Parasite

Faith is a fine invention
When gentlemen can see
But microscopes are prudent
In an emergency.
~~~Emily Dickinson

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9 posted 2003-08-20 01:08 PM


Nicole,

Love the imagery of crepe myrtle taking on the characteristics of old men. Love the storm -- I can smell it. And love the petals on your cheeks.

Nicole
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10 posted 2003-08-22 07:09 AM


Susan, I'm so glad to hear it, thank you!

Andy, thanks!

LP - I feel like I was being a touch heavy-handed and clumsy with it, but I'm so glad that you picked that up!     Yes, it is frightening, isn't it?  What's creepy, is that part came from a dream that I had the previous night.  *brrr*  Thank'ya dear

bsq - Thank you, I really appreciate the comment.     

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11 posted 2003-08-22 09:00 PM


Well, I don't remember reading you before, Nicole, but I can guarantee I look forward to reading your words again. Such beautiful writing! Enjoying this scene vicariously brought back many memories of four years living in Tallahassee, and the crepe myrtle that draped itself over my driveway.
Thank you for this gem, which I'll gladly put in my library.

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12 posted 2003-08-23 06:36 PM


Cool poem.  I enjoyed it a lot.

2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2
--Smit
My Creations

S Arthur Grey
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13 posted 2003-08-23 09:36 PM


'cause Gaia does not pick
favorites


Nor does Gaia have a bad day.
But perhaps you did.
Anyway, it's a nice poem.
I especially liked the whispering petals, a nice idea.

s.a.g.

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