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littlewing
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0 posted 08-08-2003 04:25 AM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for littlewing

Have you ever felt
like a ball of dust?

raging maelstrom
burning blaze
cool blue jewel
amongst morning haze
deep sea green
grass in need of cut
a razor's edge
a knife that's blunt
the whipping wind
a bird in flight
the eye of sky
to brighten the night
searing heat
on a summer's eve
a tire flat
a piece of meat
no matter how hard
I try
I deny
me
to
you
see
can you still

f-e-e-e-l

me?





[This message has been edited by littlewing (08-08-2003 04:38 AM).]

© Copyright 2003 Sue Eckam - All Rights Reserved
Sudhir Iyer
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1 posted 08-08-2003 10:26 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Have you ever felt
like a ball of dust?

.....

I have, I have, my friend... in fact I am feeling like one right now...

a very fine write this one, Sue...

regards
sudhir
Allysa
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2 posted 08-08-2003 04:48 PM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

This could not have been any more perfect... I feel this right now.   I hate feeling.
brian sites
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3 posted 08-09-2003 12:29 AM       View Profile for brian sites   Email brian sites   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian sites

image jabs

oh yes

feeling
you
wranx
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4 posted 08-09-2003 01:43 AM       View Profile for wranx   Email wranx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wranx

Feeling it/you here Susie. This just about covers it, yes?


Ed
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5 posted 08-09-2003 08:56 AM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

This is just such a wonderful peice of poetry, I've read it a couple of times and I think I appreciate it more every time I read it.

Andy
Allysa
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6 posted 08-09-2003 03:36 PM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

I felt like I had to reply again because I keep feeling compelled to revist this an read it over and over and over and over again...

in other words, I really really like it.
gemjop
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7 posted 08-10-2003 04:52 PM       View Profile for gemjop   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for gemjop

I have susie.

me likes this muchly, for all it says and makes me feeeeeel.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

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8 posted 08-11-2003 01:15 AM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

I love how you take an image and then transform it as the reader moves down your poem.  For me it was image transforming into image, wind transforming into bird, etc... like a pink floyd video... hehe...

Terrific writing, Suzie... you have a way of surprising me with something unique and different that I somehow never thought of doing myself.  Ok, so that sounds vain, whatever...

Glad to have you sharing with us in Haven... thanks for your contribution!

Parasite

Faith is a fine invention
When gentlemen can see
But microscopes are prudent
In an emergency.
~~~Emily Dickinson

littlewing
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9 posted 08-11-2003 01:48 PM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

Thank you Sudhir . . . *smile* for feeling this . . .

Allysa - me too, well a double edged sword indeed . . . thank you

Thank you Bri, you always do . . .

Ed . .  YES, it does . . . *smile*
thank you . . .

Thank you Andy . . . that means a lot to me

Allyssa . . . LOL you said you didnt like to feel . .  hmmmm  *smile*  thank you again

Hey Gem . . . I know you do and yes you feel moreso than the rest of us
thank you

Hey Brian, cool . . . yes I love to keep it flowing, I try to anyhow . . . and to surprise you , m'dear is an accomplishment in itself and that does not sound vain at all.  thank you . . .

Thanks guys for feeling . . .
and reading my . . . scattered thoughts?
xxoo
bsquirrel
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10 posted 08-12-2003 02:20 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Robert Smith should sing that (though he does sing some of it already).
Skyfire
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11 posted 08-13-2003 12:58 AM       View Profile for Skyfire   Email Skyfire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfire

I always feel like a ball of dust, it's rather interesting...

Awesome job The flow and rhythm is just about perfect, and it's one of those rare poems that I actually read out loud the second time just to get the entire feel of it. Great job!!

There's nothing like a good fight with a horse to put your problems into perspective

littlewing
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12 posted 08-14-2003 07:38 PM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

Thanks Mikey . . . who is Robert Smith?

Sky - thank you so much - yes a ball of dust, I know . . . thank you

Thanks guys
xxoo
 
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