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I Lay My Pen at Your Feet

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bsquirrel
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0 posted 08-06-2003 03:37 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for bsquirrel

I lay my pen at your feet.
Do with it what you will.
I pray to paper gods.
They are not neatly folded.
Neither is my laundry.
Pockets hot with quarters.

I lay my pen at your feet.
You can bleed the fine point
to create dreamed-of landscapes,
or at least a necklace.
Necklace of Pen Parts, princess.
Guaranteed good fun.

I lay my pen at your feet.
Hold the inkstick still and straight --
jerk the paper underneath.
Exercise the crinkled tear,
words to blot the table's skin.
Pass me a ciggy, or the time.

I lay my pen at your feet.
Make out the To: to me.
Any amount you feel would help.
For: the hell of it.
Sign it there at the bottom.
I'm not asking for a star.
Just another lightbulb.

So I can revise the surface,
always waiting for me to explore it
with loping scrawl -- slow words fall,
inching toward a variant texture.

I lay my pen at your feet.
All I do is all I do.
A sad and insular state of affairs.
The figures you leave bring men to tears --
your hand knows where and when to sign.
It could really help my career, my dear.
And so I lay my pen at your feet.
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1 posted 08-06-2003 03:50 PM       View Profile for Tiersdin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tiersdin

There are many ways this poem can be interpreted, Mikey. But whatever treasures the reader finds, it's always goooood!


*hugs*

~Tier
Poet deVine
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2 posted 08-06-2003 03:54 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Spectacular!! The title drew me in and the poem didn't let me down! I love the way you write.
Larry C
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3 posted 08-06-2003 04:12 PM       View Profile for Larry C   Email Larry C   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Larry C's Home Page   View IP for Larry C

Hey dude,
Won't that just get you a broken pen?

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

bsquirrel
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4 posted 08-06-2003 04:28 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Thanks. This is just me, staring down the fact that, yet again, I have less than $40 in my account until the 15th. Rather than take a clear-eyed, sober look at how to change this situation -- which would make for a boring poem -- I entertained the idea of finding a mistress who could keep food on my table while I wiled away the days.

It's not a pretty picture. But it makes for a fun pome.
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5 posted 08-06-2003 04:38 PM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

Great writing, I really enjoyed the read

Andy
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6 posted 08-07-2003 10:39 PM       View Profile for brian sites   Email brian sites   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian sites

Hold the inkstick still and straight --
jerk the paper underneath.

hey..that's the way I write!

I like it when the dark desperation
holds the pen

littlewing
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7 posted 08-08-2003 04:06 AM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

I was thinking more along the lines that money was a "she" . . .
kind of like how you say, "ladyluck"
either way - the stanza about
to and from is amazing . . .
xxoo  
bsquirrel
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8 posted 08-08-2003 02:06 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Thanks.
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9 posted 08-09-2003 03:03 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

Wow dude!  I fantasize about this too.  Awesome!

Haha, I loved the poem, it was a neat image.  Especially liked how you asked for a new lightbulb, kind of demonstrates how low-maintenance you are.  All you need is to be able to just sit in a room and scribble on papers while pizzas are slid under the door for you.  Kinda reminds me of how I lived when I was in middle school?  Haha...

Yeah, lovely writing... hermetic fantasy is great...

Parasite

Faith is a fine invention
When gentlemen can see
But microscopes are prudent
In an emergency.
~~~Emily Dickinson

 
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