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0 posted 08-04-2003 03:36 AM       View Profile for PoetryIsLife   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for PoetryIsLife

Note: I'm not sure about a title for this one. Any ideas, let me know.

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Desire and want mesh in the dark regions,
as you wonder if you are right, or if you are wrong.
You brandish your weapons against yourself,
wanting to find the answers to the questions,
the questions which plague your mind and soul.

Moral boundaries and consequences are wrought
with passion within you, as you face the reality
of a future of uncertainty, that which you once
confidently thought secure and solid no longer so.
You realize you are lost, floating in this life.

You past rears it's haunting presence about you
now and then, here and there. You feel it breathing
in the crevices of your being, you know it will
always be there with you, as certain as each coming
moment, whether it be one more or your last.

Your foundations crumbling, you stumble on,
seeking to stride confidently as you search out the now
and the soon to be. The future will come, and you
will be there. Seeking truth, seeking yourself, and
most of all, seeking reality as it truly is for all.
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1 posted 08-04-2003 07:48 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

Hi there... this poem seems to encompass what it is to be a young person, searching for themselves, what they believe, what is right, esc... in a world that's troubled and uncertain. There's the whole military/soldier aspect I picked up, but I'm thinking of it as symbolism. Maybe I'm wrong... heh.. I probably am wrong, but I try!

I'm not good with titles either, but I'd probably call this one "Seeking".

Oh, make me Thine forever
And should I fainting be
Lord, let me never ever
Outlive my love for Thee

[This message has been edited by LoveBug (08-04-2003 07:49 PM).]

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2 posted 08-06-2003 11:23 PM       View Profile for brian sites   Email brian sites   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian sites

yes this seems a poem of
growing....and seeing differently

kinda scary, huh?

this is good PIL

and true reality?
the only one you know already

your own

title?
shrug..that is personal too

nice job man
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3 posted 08-07-2003 12:45 PM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

My intial reaction involves something along the lines of slightly disarming, which is good.  I especially love the line "you brandish your weapons against yourself".

Welll....
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