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gemjop
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0 posted 08-03-2003 09:19 PM       View Profile for gemjop   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for gemjop


I remember the note written to myself
sweet surge in realisation of what we had
I still mean every word escaped upon paper
it would have been, enough, kept only in my head.

Funny, I may as well have kept them there
and torn to shreds each line of waste
like every word you lied, tears in my head today
am I being to harsh upon your withered fake?

You asked me, when did I realise how much you loved me?
without answer were you, for I, was never graced with such feelings you knew
epiphany you said, graced with my infinite heart
all I ever knew in truth was that I loved you whole

Falling over myself to heal you when in need
nurse to patient, nothing in return, but further abuse
feared you dead, my countless hours awake alone
I imagine you carried on regardless, laughing as I cried and died so young

You're stuck in my bones, you know?
wishing, but knowing I'll never out grow the mark you made
good and bad, unconditional remains,
now, I love you, and expect nothing back.



Instant karma's gonna get you.

[This message has been edited by gemjop (08-03-2003 09:24 PM).]

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1 posted 08-03-2003 09:36 PM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

I especially loved the line

"you're stuck in my bones, you know?".

That's something I've felt often.
Wind
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2 posted 08-03-2003 09:40 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

You're stuck in my bones, you know?

classic gem line. If there is such a thing I l*ved this lady...please don't use a scary smile? bones... they never change? whatever girl..lovya

insanity is not a crime

Marshalzu
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3 posted 08-05-2003 06:06 PM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

Wonderful writing, I enjoyed reading this incredible peice, thanks for sharing

Andy
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4 posted 08-06-2003 01:16 AM       View Profile for Skyfire   Email Skyfire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfire

"now, I love you, and expect nothing back."

What more is there to say? Nothing. You've summed it all up in those words.

It's hard to grow up and watch your friends remain in the same mindset that you left them in

Sudhir Iyer
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5 posted 08-06-2003 07:30 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

an exceptional write this one...

regards
sudhir
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6 posted 08-09-2003 12:38 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

You know I just can't help reading your poetry with an english accent?  Just 'cause you say you're from England.  Sorry, it's just something I tend to do.  Zu gets it too.  It's alright, it means that I actually bother to hear as well as see your writing.  Take it as a compliment.  

Nice to see you in Sanctuary.  Thanks for sharing.

Parasite

Faith is a fine invention
When gentlemen can see
But microscopes are prudent
In an emergency.
~~~Emily Dickinson

littlewing
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7 posted 08-10-2003 08:31 PM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

Gem . . .
these lines stand alone by themselves
as utter raw emotion as I have never read . . . felt yes, but not read:

Falling over myself to heal you when in need
nurse to patient, nothing in return, but further abuse
feared you dead, my countless hours awake alone
I imagine you carried on regardless, laughing as I cried and died so young

died so young . . . we shall never learn shall we?  
This one hit to the core
and stuck
xxoo  
 
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