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Nicole
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since 1999-06-23
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Florida

0 posted 2003-07-29 10:04 PM


I can bear the scent of loss
static gray and stale air
as it clings to gaily painted swatches
crying, begging
in grieve of green and supple
those veils of sheilded splendor
and magnanamous gratitude

Facing the desolate, it is all too cliche
pain and suffering
sadness and grief
conjoined twins aching for separation
fearing solitude

as cracked glass screeches, crumbles
inhibits the hug of motion
the lilting lyricism seeps and balms
cooling and aqua

I am classically renouncing destiny
but he courts unrelentless
and oily slick bitter fight
and spite
is much more comforting than abject subjugation


Note*  Warming up the muse here, it's been out of use for a while.

© Copyright 2003 Nicole Williams - All Rights Reserved
brian sites
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since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475
usa
1 posted 2003-07-29 10:15 PM


this is just warming up?!
sheesh

I've never read you before
but
that will change

this is rich and filling

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

2 posted 2003-07-29 10:16 PM


I have missed you lady.

and warming up the muse, eh?
Maybe I'll just retire the pens NOW then.


You do ache, beautifully, m'friend.


"pain and suffering
sadness and grief
conjoined twins aching for separation"

oh yes...



Doing my happy screen dance to read you again tho.

Love ya bunches, you.

Janet Marie
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Posts 18554

3 posted 2003-07-29 10:22 PM


in grieve of green and supple
those veils of sheilded splendor
and magnanamous gratitude

Facing the desolate, it is all too cliche
pain and suffering
sadness and grief
conjoined twins aching for separation
fearing solitude

as cracked glass screeches, crumbles
inhibits the hug of motion
the lilting lyricism seeps and balms
cooling and aqua

=========================

whoa...this is deep...and I love your vocabulary, verbiage and emotional expression.
And Im with Sen..you call this warming up?
My moody moth muse just ran out the door green with poetic envy.

So very good to read your words again poetess Nicole.

(check your email when you get a min)

"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

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Lurking
4 posted 2003-07-30 05:38 PM


I wish I could warm up as well as this, this is such wonderful writing, thank you for sharing it with us

Andy

Nicole
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since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835
Florida
5 posted 2003-08-01 09:25 PM


lol - please!  As if I don't just squirm in a very unnatractive poetic envy reading all of you!  

Thank you Brian, unfortunately it's taking me quite a bit to warm up and it'll be long between poems, but hopefully not too long.

Sereney Missy - Big hugs you, I've missed you!  Love ya back!

JM, thanks again for all your help, hon.  I'm the one that needs to be envious of YOUR poetry!

Thanks Andy, and from what I've read of you, you don't need any warming up!  You're great as it is!

Hugs all!

Local Parasite
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6 posted 2003-08-06 01:14 PM


I especially like your last few lines.  It's so true, isn't it?  Better to turn against something out of spite than to submit to it and let yourself be overtaken.  This is an interesting poem of loss, and the human response to loss... I'm glad I got the chance to read it.  Welcome home, Nicole.

Parasite

Faith is a fine invention
When gentlemen can see
But microscopes are prudent
In an emergency.
~~~Emily Dickinson

Munda
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Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
7 posted 2003-08-06 06:17 PM


*G* LP, you took the words right of my mouth, although I could never say it as wonderful as you do.

Nicole, I really missed reading your work. You're one of those rare poets who force me to run for my dictionary. Your muse may not be around all the time, when it's there you always manage to write awesome poetry.
Welcome back to the blue pages m'lady.

bsquirrel
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8 posted 2003-08-06 06:22 PM


You've been missed. Great write.
gemjop
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Pencilveinia, USA
9 posted 2004-04-09 07:10 PM


wow.
fractal007
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Posts 1958

10 posted 2004-04-09 11:35 PM


An interesting poem with a good amount of ironic imagery.  I liked it a lot and will certainly study it a little further.

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