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Nicole
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0 posted 07-29-2003 10:04 PM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Nicole

I can bear the scent of loss
static gray and stale air
as it clings to gaily painted swatches
crying, begging
in grieve of green and supple
those veils of sheilded splendor
and magnanamous gratitude

Facing the desolate, it is all too cliche
pain and suffering
sadness and grief
conjoined twins aching for separation
fearing solitude

as cracked glass screeches, crumbles
inhibits the hug of motion
the lilting lyricism seeps and balms
cooling and aqua

I am classically renouncing destiny
but he courts unrelentless
and oily slick bitter fight
and spite
is much more comforting than abject subjugation


Note*  Warming up the muse here, it's been out of use for a while.
© Copyright 2003 Nicole Adams - All Rights Reserved
brian sites
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1 posted 07-29-2003 10:15 PM       View Profile for brian sites   Email brian sites   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian sites

this is just warming up?!
sheesh

I've never read you before
but
that will change

this is rich and filling
serenity blaze
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2 posted 07-29-2003 10:16 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

I have missed you lady.

and warming up the muse, eh?
Maybe I'll just retire the pens NOW then.


You do ache, beautifully, m'friend.


"pain and suffering
sadness and grief
conjoined twins aching for separation"

oh yes...



Doing my happy screen dance to read you again tho.

Love ya bunches, you.
Janet Marie
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3 posted 07-29-2003 10:22 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

in grieve of green and supple
those veils of sheilded splendor
and magnanamous gratitude

Facing the desolate, it is all too cliche
pain and suffering
sadness and grief
conjoined twins aching for separation
fearing solitude

as cracked glass screeches, crumbles
inhibits the hug of motion
the lilting lyricism seeps and balms
cooling and aqua

=========================

whoa...this is deep...and I love your vocabulary, verbiage and emotional expression.
And Im with Sen..you call this warming up?
My moody moth muse just ran out the door green with poetic envy.

So very good to read your words again poetess Nicole.

(check your email when you get a min)

"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

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4 posted 07-30-2003 05:38 PM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

I wish I could warm up as well as this, this is such wonderful writing, thank you for sharing it with us

Andy
Nicole
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5 posted 08-01-2003 09:25 PM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

lol - please!  As if I don't just squirm in a very unnatractive poetic envy reading all of you!  

Thank you Brian, unfortunately it's taking me quite a bit to warm up and it'll be long between poems, but hopefully not too long.

Sereney Missy - Big hugs you, I've missed you!  Love ya back!

JM, thanks again for all your help, hon.  I'm the one that needs to be envious of YOUR poetry!

Thanks Andy, and from what I've read of you, you don't need any warming up!  You're great as it is!

Hugs all!
Local Parasite
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6 posted 08-06-2003 01:14 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

I especially like your last few lines.  It's so true, isn't it?  Better to turn against something out of spite than to submit to it and let yourself be overtaken.  This is an interesting poem of loss, and the human response to loss... I'm glad I got the chance to read it.  Welcome home, Nicole.

Parasite

Faith is a fine invention
When gentlemen can see
But microscopes are prudent
In an emergency.
~~~Emily Dickinson

Munda
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7 posted 08-06-2003 06:17 PM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

*G* LP, you took the words right of my mouth, although I could never say it as wonderful as you do.

Nicole, I really missed reading your work. You're one of those rare poets who force me to run for my dictionary. Your muse may not be around all the time, when it's there you always manage to write awesome poetry.
Welcome back to the blue pages m'lady.
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8 posted 08-06-2003 06:22 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

You've been missed. Great write.
gemjop
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9 posted 04-09-2004 07:10 PM       View Profile for gemjop   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for gemjop

wow.
fractal007
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10 posted 04-09-2004 11:35 PM       View Profile for fractal007   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fractal007

An interesting poem with a good amount of ironic imagery.  I liked it a lot and will certainly study it a little further.

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