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Riley
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0 posted 07-29-2003 11:59 AM       View Profile for Riley   Email Riley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Riley

well i have had a writers block and this is the lastest....tell me what ya think....


Shredded pieces of a past lay scattered across eyes
That searched a haunted room for her soul
Her rags got caught on jagged metal
Sticking out from the cold hands she trusted
Now as the blood runs down her spine
Into her mouth from the ceiling fan
All she can do is laugh, for the taste is enjoyable.
Thick and luscious, she drinks with a thirst
That cannot be quenched.

Its an unavoidable hate that rests deep within
Rain that pours down outside her window


*the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time*

[This message has been edited by Riley (07-29-2003 12:38 PM).]

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1 posted 07-29-2003 12:08 PM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

(resists the urge to sing) To quote someone who responded to a poem of mine, this fits in with the song I'm listening to. A little scary if you ask me...it was chilling. ok bunny..

insanity is not a crime

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2 posted 07-29-2003 10:22 PM       View Profile for brian sites   Email brian sites   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian sites

niceeee
and
DARK
Riley

I liked it...
I used to write things like this

hmmm..
maybe I should do it again

veryvivid
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3 posted 07-30-2003 11:32 AM       View Profile for Riley   Email Riley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Riley

wind- resisting the urge to sing, whats that? glad you enjoyed


brian sites- thanks a lot for replying...


riley

*the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time*

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4 posted 08-01-2003 04:46 PM       View Profile for Ceinwyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ceinwyn

umm not bad for writer's block....I like dark...dark isss very very goooood

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

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5 posted 08-02-2003 01:16 PM       View Profile for Riley   Email Riley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Riley

cein: thanks a lot...yes dark is lovely

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

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ah ha! i have just read you in open, and i see there are more delights to be found in your name...dark..mmmm good..me likesssss.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

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7 posted 08-03-2003 08:20 PM       View Profile for Riley   Email Riley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Riley

dark is my specialty this week ( more like year )


thankies a lot

:hug:

riley

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

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8 posted 08-04-2003 07:55 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

Dark and scary, ah!

But I think that this is about the loss of innocence.. a harsh and painful thing to lose indeed. And when it is lost, things *are* dark and scary, so it all fits! Good job!

Oh, make me Thine forever
And should I fainting be
Lord, let me never ever
Outlive my love for Thee

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9 posted 08-05-2003 10:18 AM       View Profile for Riley   Email Riley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Riley

lovebug: thank you for your kind words and taking the time to reply. it is much appreciated.....


riley

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

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10 posted 08-06-2003 01:05 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

Again, I love how your title relates to your poem as a whole.  Classic innocence, the child laughing despite the blood dripping into her mouth (from the ceiling fan?  eww!), as usual a powerful and creative image.  You always give my mind something new to do.

Thanks for sharing this one with us, Ri, you crazy little girl you...

Bri

Faith is a fine invention
When gentlemen can see
But microscopes are prudent
In an emergency.
~~~Emily Dickinson

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11 posted 08-06-2003 01:25 PM       View Profile for Riley   Email Riley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Riley

Bri: crazy would be me....dark crazy helpless...oh this sounds good


lol





riley

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

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12 posted 08-06-2003 01:47 PM       View Profile for Ringo   Email Ringo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ringo

*****Time For A Muppet News Flash*****

Today, a poet on the PIP web site cleared the block that had been tormenting him. Sources tell us that he has done an excellent job and is to be commended.
News at 11.

We are all equal but were individually different
and able to reach the impossible if we try.

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13 posted 08-06-2003 04:46 PM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

Great writing Riley, I understand how hard it is to have writers block but this is just fantastic

Andy
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14 posted 08-06-2003 05:08 PM       View Profile for Riley   Email Riley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Riley

Ringo and Zu: thank you both so much for replying...it means a lot.


riley

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

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15 posted 08-06-2003 06:23 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Like a combination of Crash (glass 'n' blood) and Apocalypse now (rotors 'n' confusion).

'notherwords:
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16 posted 08-06-2003 07:40 PM       View Profile for Riley   Email Riley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Riley

bsquirrel- thank you alot

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

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17 posted 08-07-2003 11:08 AM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

heh..came back to read it again. LP's reply made me crack up. I can imagine him saying in a girly voice "eewww" haha..my thoughts are strange.

insanity is not a crime

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18 posted 08-07-2003 12:41 PM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

It is good to see that you have overcome your writer's block.  

And wonderfully, too.
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19 posted 08-07-2003 01:40 PM       View Profile for Riley   Email Riley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Riley

wind- your thought are not stange just VERY different ( i swear i am insane )


allysa-thank you for replying

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

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20 posted 08-13-2003 09:45 AM       View Profile for Child of the Stars   Email Child of the Stars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Child of the Stars

It's things like this that make me doubt the existence of writer's block at all. I'm a sucker for past-looking and super weird imagery...*sighs contentedly* Glad you shared this.

  ~Carly

"How inimitably graceful children are in general before they learn to dance!"
           --Samuel Taylor Coleridge

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21 posted 08-13-2003 07:03 PM       View Profile for Riley   Email Riley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Riley

carly- thanks much for the compliments, glad you enjoyed!

ri

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