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brian sites
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0 posted 07-24-2003 01:50 AM       View Profile for brian sites   Email brian sites   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for brian sites


red makes a bell sound
and hollows you

gold lipped
and dry-brown

you flutter
  - a treeless leaf

into my hand's mouth
and die

three times around
is the key

my trunk withdraws
and you wrap

the blood around
each vein
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gemjop
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1 posted 07-24-2003 06:57 AM       View Profile for gemjop   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for gemjop

too many lines here that made me drool to quote.

into my library

Instant karma's gonna get you.

serenity blaze
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2 posted 07-24-2003 07:46 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

You are meditation.

You don't just describe, you become the very thing itself.

I'm not sure why, but this reminded me of that time I told you about--in the courtyard of that pub. Hmmm...maybe I'll just shut up and write about it.

You inspire me, m'love.

Wind
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3 posted 07-24-2003 11:09 AM       View Profile for Wind   Email Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wind

this reminds me of the song bleed..well without the f word but honestly this is beautiful and tragic...I will look forward to more

"take all these strings, they call me veins..wrap them around every..(coughs) thing"

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4 posted 07-24-2003 02:01 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

I like the imagery.  I don't entirely understand this poem's intent, I'm not good at analyzing the vivid-images-in-simple-language stuff.  Call me crazy, call me dumb, call me whatever.  

I can't really comment on your poem because I honestly don't understand it.  I'll read it later, maybe...

Parasite

Faith is a fine invention
When gentlemen can see
But microscopes are prudent
In an emergency.
~~~Emily Dickinson

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...


5 posted 07-25-2003 04:15 AM       View Profile for vlraynes   Email vlraynes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit vlraynes's Home Page   View IP for vlraynes


Brian...this is amazing...YOU are amazing.
A master of imagery for sure.
Love this, my friend..

"My friends are my estate."
~Emily Dickinson

Marshalzu
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Lurking


6 posted 07-25-2003 03:14 PM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

I really enjoyed the read, thanks for sharing

Andy
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7 posted 07-25-2003 10:16 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

You and others
are why I don't write here...

I can't match up.

But I can bless you
for leaving these...
littlewing
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8 posted 07-26-2003 09:03 AM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

You are the leaf . . .
amazing . . .
xxoo
brian sites
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9 posted 07-27-2003 12:30 AM       View Profile for brian sites   Email brian sites   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian sites

thank you everybody...

and Brian?
dont worry about it
I dont understand it either
I just take down the dictation
and I am not kidding
Child of the Stars
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10 posted 07-28-2003 04:03 PM       View Profile for Child of the Stars   Email Child of the Stars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Child of the Stars

Oooh shiver shiver. I enjoyed this....

  ~Carly

"How inimitably graceful children are in general before they learn to dance!"
           --Samuel Taylor Coleridge

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space


11 posted 07-28-2003 09:01 PM       View Profile for Aenimal   Email Aenimal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aenimal

Pure Sites thru and thru, powerful use of images there's a disjointed feel to this throws the reader off balance..know what i mean?
Ceinwyn
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12 posted 07-30-2003 10:27 PM       View Profile for Ceinwyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ceinwyn

I've got to borrow Carly's reply..shivers...just oohhhhh...*speechless*

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

 
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