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Poet deVine
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***NOTE: I wanted to tell you where I got the inspiration for this. I was watching a Discovery Channel show on the mating habits of the moose (bored?). The bull moose rubs his antlers against trees and rubs off the 'velvet'. He eats most of it until there is nothing left. This is all in preparation for the mating season. After the velvet is shed, he and other males 'fight' using the newly shorn antlers. Cool huh?



Shedding the Velvet

Prepare for the melee
This battle of poetic wit
Take your shot, take a chance
Now is not the time to sit

My choice of weapons?
The truth is what I choose
Tis the only weapon
With which I shall not lose

I shall not waver in this cause
But stand up to this adversity
Nefarious schemes hold no sway
This battle is for integrity  

Hide in the coward shadows
For the light is your enemy
The truth is here in the open
Of that Iíll guarantee

Iíll shed the velvet
Harden for winterís fight
Behind me stands the symbol
Of everything thatís right.

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1 posted 07-04-2003 10:11 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

(I am now trying to picture a "moose" world, where they are watching humans on the Discovery Channel--and unveiled, are the mating preparation rites of serenity! giggles and gasp?)

and you, this has the stoic courage of Braveheart's cry of "FREEDOM"--strength and integrity are apparent m'lady.

Write on.

I've got yer back.
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2 posted 07-05-2003 10:07 PM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allysa

Very interesting write...  I learned something new today so very very cool.

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3 posted 07-06-2003 11:32 AM       View Profile for brian sites   Email brian sites   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian sites

grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr

dig them heels in

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If I didn't know better I'd say you were starting to join on the Local Parasite Bandwagon of combining natural imagery with human experience.  This was a really cool poem.  Thanks for clarifying it with your little introduction.

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Ah, Sharon. I liked this a lot. Be it mind or brawn ... armed with the truth, or with newly shorn antlers ... the survival of the fittest prevails.

Very much enjoyed the metaphor and the images this brought to mind.

Best wishes,
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6 posted 07-07-2003 11:31 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Me too the metaphors that you brought into this one were just great (I liked it cause Bullwinkle is from Canada ya know right?"  They forgot to mention that the moose look horrible during the shedding process and they are not happy campers so do NOT ask them what they are doing when they are doing it okay?  Speaking of Moose there is Moosehead beer - it's great for hot and muggy days   I loved this one Sharon.
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7 posted 07-13-2003 03:12 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

I have my own bandwagon?  Haha... awesome!!  

Well, Sharon, I gotta say this is one of the best I've read from you.  I love that kind of inspiration--learning something new and fascinating about the natural world and using it to parallel some human thought or experience, as you've done.  It's a great way to get the muse in gear... isn't it?

I disagree with the message of your poem, however... truth isn't something that should be wielded as a weapon, because the very nature of truth itself is volatile and unstable, and not to be trusted as a "weapon."  It could very well turn out to be your opponent's weapon after all.  There should be no battle, only co-operation with a common goal in mind.  Truth is a goal, not a means...

Just my humble opinion though... nonetheless, awesome poetry PdV... I very much enjoyed.

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8 posted 07-14-2003 09:15 AM       View Profile for wranx   Email wranx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wranx

Love this Sharon,

And not just because I preach from that pulpit, or because I understand the need to say this.

But because I'd NEVER have thought to pick the bullmoose analogy
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Thank you all for your kind comments. When the muse is on vacation we find inspiration in so many things. Being a watcher of human nature and nature itself, I am always looking for something to give me that spark. I've always prided myself on finding the unobvious way of twisting a phrase around to make a point in a poem.
 
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