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LoveBug
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0 posted 2003-06-26 02:08 AM


I know that you’re afraid
The future is dark, cold
Uncertain in the worse sense
I know I’m the most unlikely
But please, take my hand
I’ll guide you through the wilderness
The best way I know how

I found you broken, alone
I was the same way
We were both stumbling along
Walking on broken bones
Cut flesh, bruised souls
Along a rocky path
And when one fell, we did not
As others do, go on ourselves
No, we stooped down
Placing the other’s weight
Upon our own tried and tired bodies
And, somehow, someway
We both progressed

Yes, we have progressed since then
The road is not much easier
We haven’t completely healed
But we have begun
Yes, we have begun
And now we come to a darkness in the road

What will we find
Beyond where we stand now
Paused, looking about
Uncertain of what to do next

I say, my dearest
My love, my one true person
In this world of deceit and falsehood
That you need not run from me
Blinded, into the darkness alone
I know you’re afraid
But take my hand
Please take my hand
For whatever may come
We can face together

And perhaps, someday
The path will be easy
We will see to the horizon
We will be healed and whole
We will walk into the light
Hand in hand


Oh, make me Thine forever
And should I fainting be
Lord, let me never ever
Outlive my love for Thee


[This message has been edited by LoveBug (06-26-2003 07:15 PM).]

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Sudhir Iyer
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1 posted 2003-06-26 06:51 AM


What an endearing write...

Lovely

Regards
Sudhir

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2 posted 2003-06-26 07:19 AM


What will we find
Beyond where we stand now
Paused, looking about
Uncertain of what to do next

I say, my dearest
My love, my one true person
In this world of deceit and falsehood
That you need not run from me
Blinded, into the darkness alone
I know you’re afraid
But take my hand
Please take my hand
For whatever may come
We can face together

=============================

sounds like you are well on the right road...
the beauty of this tender write is its sincerety, its devotion...and its hope.
Lovely heart write poetess LB.

All I can feel is this distance between you and me.
I can say I love you but I can't make you believe me
because touching is believing.

c.j.

ESP
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3 posted 2003-06-27 08:51 AM


This is lovely, Erica!
Beautiful flow and beautiful sentiments!
Thanks for sharing
Luv, Liz xxx

"Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~

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4 posted 2003-07-09 10:08 PM


Very honest sweetie...and right now, it's the un-coated I'm adoring. I hope the "you" has heard you somehow. Thanks for the reminder to...mind things like this.

  ~Carly

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and half a soul to go
                     -el sol
                        --Zwan

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5 posted 2003-07-12 03:54 PM


aww *hugs* I'll email you back later this afternoon, I promise.
This is just wow I always enjoy reading your work, even if I don't always reply hang in there

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6 posted 2003-07-13 01:45 AM


And perhaps, someday
The path will be easy
We will see to the horizon
We will be healed and whole
We will walk into the light
Hand in hand

"I beleive this with my whole heart...thanks for reminding me that the path does get easier..."

Wonderful write LoveBug

Tima

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7 posted 2003-07-13 01:23 PM


Haha, your critique message made me grin.  Somehow like you tailored it especially to me.     Hmmmm?

I like a lot of this, Erica... the one thing I like the most about your poetry is the actual story that you tell, the setting you describe and the events and characters involved.  Those have always been my favourite poems of yours, the ones that tell some kind of deep and interesting story.

The going-down-a-road thing is a tad cliche but I think it was still pretty appropriate, I had a neat image in my head of two tired, weary souls treading on despite their cuts and wounds, not sure of what lies ahead...

Well, Erica, you're an intelligent girl... you may not know what lies ahead, but you know what lies beyond, right?  

Brian

Poets are the unacknowledged legislators of the world.
~Percy Bysshe Shelley

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8 posted 2003-08-05 12:55 PM


I know this is a long time coming, sorry! :P

Sudhir- I'm honored to get such a compliment from a wonderful poet

JM- Thank you for your comments.. you're right, I did have a lot of passion and hope when that was written

ESP- Thanks for the reply! I hope you're having fun in France

Carly- I'm glad if it helped you out, it didn't have the desired effect for me, but thanks for the reply

Rhonda- Thank you for the comments and also for the email.. I'm STILL waiting for that reply

Tima- Thank you for letting me know that my writing helped you out

Brian- Well, who else would that message be for? :P I'm glad that you enjoyed the story and the imagery.. it didn't end the way I would have liked, but I guess thats all part of the journey. Yeah, I know what's beyond this mortal coil.. thats about all I know though! I guess thats enough.

Thanks everyone

Oh, make me Thine forever
And should I fainting be
Lord, let me never ever
Outlive my love for Thee

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